Very well done!

I love your writing, it's appropriate with the story and tasteful. I do like that you've had Christine and Erik recognize their chemistry in this, even if Christine is still naive to mature emotions. I'm excited to see how you continue this.

Spectacular! I loved every word of it. You have improved greatly.
Brava.

Nicely written, but too...Unassuming. Your use of soft words and moderate descriptions paint a hazy picture of your scenes. Go in-depth; be striking. Give yourself expansion and improvement. You will go far. As of now though, you seem rather inexperienced. I suggest titling your WITHIN the story. It makes you seem more professional and devoted. A disclaimer or author's note would also be wise. Never miss an opportunity to connect with your readers or make them smile.
Heed my advice. I look forward to your next update/upload.

With all possible sincerity,
-angelicdamnation

PS: It is spelled "Leroux" dear, not "Luroux". ;)

please update!