More please

And another great story died!

Did you get some of those spells from The Slayers?

sav make sal s

Even though this story hasn't been updated for over 5 years, I haven't given up hope! I want to find out what happens next!

"Remus looked at his friend's disgusted face and did something between a snort and a chuckle."

I like to call it a snortle.

Wow...I truly can't wait to learn more about kitsune, the unseelie court and sidhe in general. But also to find out just how Harry choose the name Zepaphur, but also how he came to be sidhe? Also why does Dumbledore believe that "Harry Potter" is off studying with mage's?

I'm guessing that since the unusual events surrounding the high priestess's ritual and the unfortunate shedding of many different types of magical creature blood is what; (a) brought about Dudley's sudden transformation into kitsune? (b) did the ritual and the strange wild force that initially drew Harry there that caused his sudden transformation of his former dormant sidhe blood in his family tree?

Just how long did it take the order to realise something had happened to Harry? Or is the supposed tale of him going to study with mage's simply a ruse whilst Dumbledore and the order looks for him? Just what is the mysterious secret that Severus so desperately wants to prevent anyone learning at all costs?

Four chapters in, and this fic certainly interesting. Nearly chewed a hole in the cord of my headphones trying to figure out what exactly Harry (and by extension, Snape) is. And where/when exactly that little tidbit will be revealed. I find that I'm not even as bothered by Dudley's change in character as I normally am in certain kinds of fics; I may not have seen the transformation since I suspect that it mostly took place in his school, with just a bit of 'polishing' by Vernon.

However, it seems that something's been eating your fic. There are a number of places where words - or maybe even entire sentences - are missing; like the part where Olivander is taking the boys down to the grove. ("... The other shelf closed itself and a trap door was revealed. [paragraph break] opened the trap door and led them down below.") These missing bits make it harder to read the fic. That said, your writing shows a good grasp of both spelling and grammar that many other fics on this site lack; as well as nicely developed/developing style.

Please keep up the good work, but also do a quick read over (or have someone else do one) before you post to avoid the missing words problem.

jw

it's a nice story

when do you tell what powers snape has

(I am obsessed with him)

I hope you edit a chapter soon

you!

I have read your story since you posted it first, and now i've found it again!

you must update! the suspense will kill us all

wow. i almost forgot about this story. I hope that you put up a new chapter to this amazing story but at the least an ending for it? hope to review soon

Not dead, huh? You haven't updated in almost a year. As much as I would love to see this work of art completed I don't have much hope of it. Still, so far its been sheer brillance and I would love to see more of it. A little clip where Snape tries to find Zeaphur and can't locate his rooms or manages to find them and is repeled by the wards would be hilarious. So what electives is Zeaphur goin to take?

Keep writing and PLEAASE UPDATE!

very good

I love this story. I'm really curious to see who ends up in the elemental class. I would also love to see the first interactions between Zeaphur and Draco and Solis and Draco...that could be interesting.

Love this fic. update soon. Why do Darvan & Valinor hate each other?