I think ya mean gun barrel not nozzle

CONNOR K!

You captured Batman's character quite well, I appreciate that so much!

I think you should it would be awesome to see Death and Nightwing fighting together against the Reach and the Light with Blue Beetle.

Actually Jason Todd was in it. He was killed making Tim Drake the third robin. If you,go online there is a young justice wiki website if you look up Robin then you will see all three of the bearers of the moniker Robin: Dick Grayson, Jason Todd, and finally Tim Drake.

I am not going to lie. At first, I really thought Life was going yo be one of those typical sues but as I read on, I realized that she's actually very fun with her personality and her interactions with the Team. Though, I was rooting for Wally to be shipped with her since Zachary is a bit too up stuck for my taste. I do ship her and Robin as well now.

This was a great fic (I spent two days reading this) but it was good fun. I'm off to read the sequel now :) Keep up the great work.

I'm jumping back into this old fic even though it's completely finish because honestly, re-reading this fic, Life is coming off as a total Mary Sue and not a lot of things really add up for her?

I also just like re-reading old fics I once enjoyed and now things in this fic are just striking me as odd and don't make much sense.

How exactly does she fit into the Crock timeline? There's no way this chapter is the first time Life is meeting her "sisters". After all, when Paula went to jail when Artemis was around nine years old, Lawrence was the one who raised her for the next six years until Paula got out of jail. There's not way he could've trained and took care of Artemis AND trained and took care of Life during that time. If anything, Artemis and Life would've been trained together and would've met each other way before joining the team together.

Lawrence is many things, but it's hard to believe he'd cheat on Paula with another woman after already having two children to take care of. Life is like what, two years younger than Artemis? She being a Crock feels very forced and poorly thought out. I'm sure there's a way, but Paula and Lawrence were partners- in marriage and crime. They worked together for a lot of things. Had Lawrence actually been cheating on her and had a secret other child, Paula most likely never would've taken the fall for Lawrence like she did. Maybe during the time Paula was in jail Lawrence might've found another woman and spawned a child with her, but then that child would've been a max of six years old in season one.

And then, of course, she still joins the Arrow family as Ollie's "daughter". Life sometimes comes off as Artemis but with magic powers.

Also, there's really no such thing as a dark magician in the DC universe. All magician's born with magical powers are just homo magi's. There's no special title. If Life were to choose to use her powers in a negative way with some darker spells then I guess she would fall under the category of dark magician. But that's more so using her powers wrong than anything. Life is just a simple homo magi like Zatanna and Zatara.

And please work on Dick and Life's ship because they don't balance each other out and I can't exactly see why they're a ship at this point in time. They feel forced and almost like you let your readers get the better of you. Zach and Life as a ship is better off than Dick and Life in my opinion.

I really want to like Life and I once did really like her! Your writing is phenomenal and you're really good at getting Life's thoughts and feelings across, but her background just doesn't make sense. If you look more into it, it just shows the lack of research you did for this fic. She doesn't fit into the Crock family very well, dark magicians don't actually exist, and her personality clashes too much with Dick's for them to actually be a ship. But personality and flaw wise, Life is a decently developed OC in comparison to other OCs you see out there. I can't think of a single thing wrong with her personality besides for the fact it clashes a bit too much with Dick's at this stage in their life for them to actually be "in love" and dating.

I'm saying all this now because now that YJ is getting a new season, maybe you'll look into correcting the major issues Life actually has and I guess re-booting her? Not saying you'll need to completely re-write this fic, but fix up the kinks and the issues that don't add up so they do add up!

Life was- and still technically is- one of the best developed OCs I've seen on this site. I really enjoyed reading her story but now that time has passed and I've come back to it, the flaws in the character background are more obvious than they were before.

so confusing whos death and there's artemis she her sis? what?

I kninda liked protective Rob... And Zach, the little turd, trying to flirt with her.

Gina in another Form! *CRIES UNTIL EYE BLEED*

pfffffft... Tonsil Hockey... XD

OMG I GOT SHIVERS AT THE END!

I translated it on Google Translate (not very accurate but the best I can get my hands on) and...
YOUR HINDI! After I learn, French, Japanese, Romanian, and Italian, I'M LEARNING HINDI! You think YOU can teach me instead of some crappy website? PLEASE

I just finished Reading your story and I love it so much! It's one of the best fanfics I have read so far! I laughed so much and the ending was so good️️️️

Lol good ending chapter. I saw a part of the sequel i have a feeling we're all gonna want to kick Nightwing's perfect ass when we find out what happened between him and Life.