Very nice and sweet! Not something you really read in this fandom (or at least portrayed well and not over the top). I had enjoyed this very much! :)

cuteeeee3
great job!

O wow so cute I love it so much :)

awesome! i honestly thought that you were going to write another chapter about the marriage or engagement thing though. But a great story! made my day happier!

This was well written. I do have one thng to nitpick here is that the age gap is 12 years between Asami and Akihito.

There needs to be cheesy proposal scene now XD I'll just imagine it...and Akihito in a dress.

I really like it.

Hahahaha the next thing aki knows...he has a ring on his finger..."Your marrying me without my permission Asami!?" It be very hilarious...hahahahahahah

Lol they should get married, i think they are perfect together and this was really good i almost started crying when reading the letters. Loved it!

Enjoyed how you wrote Aki's POV!

Yami, um...I hope you realized that you are being trolled. I've been browsing through your stories and looking at the reviews. BooBoo, eeoo, Mara, and Anonguest seem to be the same person or just a group of low lives. It's pitiful on their part, and they should be ashamed of themselves. Really, don't listen to shits like that, keep doing your stuff. You and your sister. Honestly, I'm tired of reading finder fics where Takaba is so damn submisive, just lets Asami fuck him when he wants. I like stories where Takaba takes a stand, where Takaba may be alone, but breaks free from Asami. I think you capture characterzation really well, and though your stoires are angsty, they are very realistic.

I like your writing, because it is different, it is not predicatble at all, and it always leaves readers wanting a sequel. The only reason people are trolling you is because they're jealous. So if you're reading this, keep writing, because my heart jumps with joy when I've seen that you've updated or published a story.

And keep in mind that you're 17, you write very well for a 17 year old, and you are a very, very nice girl. Your profile sums it up. So please don't stop writing, don't listen to these idiots.

-Loy

Omg! A beautiful fic

This is in no way me saying that you should draw your inspiration from other authors, stories, but even the best VF fanfic authors out there started out as simple readers, fans of other authors, as this is a fandom established more than 10 years ago. Having said this, I just have one simple curiosity - do you have a favorite VF fic? A favorite author? Have you ever read a VF fanfic? Because it's more than obvious that you don't comprehend the true essence and personalities of these characters. You have potential as a writer, but frankly, your age shows in your writing, particularly in this piece. I don't know about your other stories, but here it's painfully obvious.

If you want my honest opinion about this fic, it's that it's poorly written and unrealistic. I have a very hard time trying to imagine that this is Asami's and Takaba's voice. They would never sound even remotely like this! If you can't even make their voices somewhat believable, don't bother writing a fic from their POV because honestly, this is awful. Your characterization is so shallow. There could be so much character depth but instead it sounds like they're both teenage girls. Which only shows you up as an author who doesn't have the ability to properly write them.

And if you're going to have 'Asami Ryuichi' sign his own name at the bottom of the letter, at least spell it right. Goddamn, this is what I'm talking about it being bad writing.

On top of that, your writing comprehension is so poor it makes reading this painfully disjointed. I mean, it's painful to read anyway, but the lack of better grammar just makes it worse.

It was a heartbreaking letter, i almost cryed