This story was not meant to be well written. Given that it's a satire of several reincarnation/timetravel fics, I found it to be an entertaining piece of shit - kind of like hamlet 2, or eromanga sensei. The grammar was poor, you lived up to the story's name, and I feel like I wasted an hour of my life, but it was funny.

It was an interesting idea that was funny it is not really taking it self seriously way up until ths chapter.

Things that could be improved:
*Try using grammaly its free and would catch some of the grammar an incorrect wording (but not all),

*Go back over what you write and try to pad it out with detail (but don't go over the top), making things feel more real and passing. (Harry just accepts lot and us readers have no clue why.

*continuity Lilly makes no sences as you have her have like 4 backgrounds maybe explaining that a bit more might make things less confusing.

*course and effect, there is a lot that happens yet appears to create no repercussion make notes to help plan for longer term points.

*even i a piss take flix sometimes keeping things realistic helps make it better (like why is Dumshit still alive after finding Fleur's sister, killing him or at least halling his ass in to custody. )

It was a take i had not see befor and i hope you comeback and fix and finish this story or at least have enough go at the plot.

I am not sure this a flame or not but I will say I have read some garbage but this the title says it all I can follow so it is not trash the idea is great but it is like you took all the bad and made into a story the story flows if you can follow it love to see this idea more polished and cleaned up but over all great job

you should have titled this how to write a very very very very very very very bad story.

Dumbledore is gay what the hell would he want veela for

Interesting story.

Have not seen a rewrite from Dark Angel Nemesis. Have a story with many features here that breaks up to 3 stories. Hope you still write. Enjoy!

? I think it would have been better, that James went to his other wife, mentioned earlier. Then the died, her cheating with Sirius, as they both did cutting curses or the"killing curse at same time. Both coma both die 12 hours later!

Its a very good story over all. A few errors. A little fast paced for a great story. It was descent about the Horcruxes. It is timed very well.

OK Very interesting!

You are wrong if you go on Google and type English to French then type flight form death you get volt de la mort not voldemort

... yuck

Can you tell me more about who adobed this story cause I can not find it.

Okay, first off, BRAN castle is located in Transylvania, Romania. There is no 'Castle Dracula,' just Bran Castle. Second, it was Vlad Tepes, Dracula was just a name he gave himself, this father was Vlad Dracul, but the Impaler wasn't.

What is this I don't even-