Okay, this is Mary Sue story, it could be such a good story, but right now it's junk.

I like this story, but way do you have to make an OP twin? Really it's little over the top.

I really like how you have Petunia being nice to the kids because it's different but it makes sense. Since Lily was a witch, it's weird that she never learned to accept it in the real book. Love this chapter'

dumbledores name is albus percival wulfric brian dumbledore

Good start on what looks to be a great story.

I like how petunia isn't as awful to them in your fanfic. There arn't a lot like this

The title is bad, the summary is bad (and no, do not give me that 'I'm bad at summaries' rubbish, it's no excuse), Albus' letter is way way WAY too short, the first chapter sounds rushed, the characterization is bad, and this Sidney girl utterly reeks of Mary Sue. Oh, and the chapter itself is short, which isn't necessarily a bad thing but doesn't exactly make your story look good in this situation. I'm not really inclined to read the next chapter. If this is a troll, then you have succeeded. If you genuinely consider this a story, then... well, you have a long way to go. Just keep trying to improve. Get a beta. You'll get there. Someday. Hopefully.

Glad that Sidney's birth went smoothly, and that there's no Dursley in the twins - otherwise, that would just be terrible. What a nice ending - I hope you'll write a sequel.

I'm now 'Following' UvUv123... I'll see the new story hot off the digital press. :-)

-HBT

Cool-ritual magic! I keep hoping for more of that in stories. JKR never specified, but I assume making a horcrux is a ritual. The Fidelius charm probably is, too. So many spells are just a wave of a wand and a few funny words. Anyway, nice job!

-HBT

I'm going to assume the twins are not Mr. and Miss Potter-Dursley. :-) I hope there aren't any shenanigans with the hospital staff, and they really are just cleaning up the newborns...

-HBT

Wow

So... Did Sidney die? I'm confused.

The last line of this chapter-even under the circumstances (dangerous delivery of twins, etc.) is still pretty darn funny. :-) Good job!

-HBT

It's lovely to see more Draney interaction, and to know that at least SOMEONE is feeding her. Will the babies be all right? I mean, I hope Sidney's lack of nourishment won't effect them negatively. I look forward to seeing the results, and maybe knowing the gender of the children - though, just as a real life reference, she shouldn't be so fat yet, she's only, what, a month or two along? - so update soon!