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oh my god you saw skillet?! I am so jealous, I love them! I now have the utmost respect for you.

Oh my gosh! It actually felt as i got a kiss from gajeel maybe i didn't win but i loved how you included everyone anyway! Hope you will do something like this again in the future.

I definitely enjoyed my kiss

Your grammar/spelling needs a little work but otherwise it's good. Quotation marks and who's talking make more clear. I like the part in the tram with rude guy that hurt Levy.

The end of chapter 8

Ok, I'll give it a shot.

1.I think the story is pretty good so far, so it's hard to say what I like.

2. Hmmmm... don't have a least favorite part.

3. for when you have a character speak, since it's technically not real life I recommend using the " and not the ' unless the character is quoting something. also I recommend the separating thing so that way people know something's happening in a different area.

4. Just jeep going with the story the way it is!

I'm not sure if it's too late to be posting this, but I'll do it anyways cuz I love your writing!

Fav part: I'm tied between when Levi told her joke in the beginning (that had menlaughing so hard by the way) and when Mirajane slipped the *cough* unwanted clothing into Levi's bag. Mirajanes match making and Levi's reactions are so perfect XD. Also, I must say your descriptions of theadventures hotel were very nice.

Least fav: There's not much I didn't like, although the whole 'only one bed' thing was a bit cliche, but I guess it's necessary when you need to get to characters together. I'm a little confused at what Levi's trying to hide? She has a stuffed animal? XD

Grammar: I haven't found many mistakes (and I bet we both know how horrible the grammar of people on here can be) I have seen a few punctuation errors while reading, but nothing major or worth going back over. Most people won't notice it anyways, and I'd be a hypocrite if I ever said my writing doesn't have some errors like these even after careful editing. You have nothing to worry about!

Improvement: I like your writing and story line just the way it is! All the emotions and actions felt and done by all the individual characters are perfect.

I hope that this is the kind of review you wanted, and if you wish for me to elaborate further on any of these subjects, please ask! :)

Hi jammie-san, Ingalia here One of my favourite moments are when levy discovers Mira's "little surprise" in one of her bags, typical Mira ;) And when Gajeel says he wouldn't mind if levy would wear them, I nearly fainted XD

My least favourite moment... that must be when that stupid old dude bumped into Levy in the last chapter. Definitely the most annoying moment ever!

I want to point out two things about your writing. First, your grammar is pretty good but you always write "women", when it should be "woman" in some places. The correct way is to use woman when it is singular, and women when it is plural. A woman, and, many women. :)
The second thing is you can consentrate a lot more of your writing on the relationship between gajeel and levy, and just drop some of the explanations. Like when in chapter 9, when levy explains how they can get to the sushi bar, she could just have said: "it will be a 30 minutes walk", or something like that.

I am really hyped to read the rest of your story!

1. My favorite part was when gajeel held levy in his sleep ( oddly enough it's the fluff that gets us rather than the actual lemon)
2. My least favorite part would have to be when levy helped the kid so far because it didn't do much to help the plot quite frankly
3. On the grammar be sure to use "rather than ' because some can get confused
4. I think to make the story more enjoyable to add some plot twists and character development as to why they do this or that
5. I really like your story;)

Favorite part? All your commentary! It's hilarious.
Least favorite part? Waiting for new stuff.
Grammar? Pretty good for going over it by yourself. Nothing too serious ever.
Improvements? Refer back to the least favorite comment.
This was great, but I kind of wish Gajeel did get to beat the guy up a little bit...maybe he can track him down at night after Levy is asleep...I'm horrible I know :)

1) My favorite part of the story was when the pregnant lady told the ticket man what happened with Levy and the rude upper-class man.
2) my least favorite part was when the rude upper-class moron practically SHOVED Levy on the tram...
3) Grammar is awesome.
4) you can add more paragraphs, that way people won't get lost in the story and reread lines...
5) I LOVE GALE! *FANGIRLING*

I would definitely like to see what Gajeel would do with Levy in those new under wear

It's about time! Finally the good stuff

I like it, I love it, I want some more of it!