| Reviews for Just Following Orders |
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one.flame56 chapter 4 . 1/9/2016 cute |
Banghg chapter 4 . 9/24/2015 He, me salé éste capitulo por accidente. Por favor continua, me encanta este fic. |
voice of reason chapter 4 . 10/27/2014 So far I'm enjoying your fanfic Please update soon |
Axel yamamoto chapter 4 . 5/27/2014 How are you? Good I hope. Let me say this; this in itself was a unique story that involve Barbara, since Disgaea D2 I have fallen in love with her. However, I could see several flaw in them, one of them is that Laharl is a bit OOC, but that can be overlook. Second you should lessen the name using after you said it once in a paragraph, like for example: 'A week ago, Sicily has given Barbara order to do whatever she wants to do in her free time. Sicily was usuly-' There, if you can don't use the name twice. Change it into something like: 'The overlord sister' or 'The young angel'. Example: 'A week ago, Sicily has given Barbara order to do whatever she wants to do in her free time. The young angel was usually-' There's also a bit of grammar mistake here and there, but that can be overlook for now. This is by no mean a flame, just a friendly critics from a fellow author. Anyway, that's all for now, though I'm fairly dissapointed that it lack the dark humor of Disgaea, but I can relate how hard it is to create a humor fic. Hail to those who suceeded. Well, that's all for now. If you need help feel free to PM me and I'll help you as much as I can. Sign, Axel Yamamoto. |
Killthief99 chapter 4 . 5/9/2014 WOW This was just great. I've gotta say, Felix seems to be one amazing cat. I just imagine Felix to be like Bra-nyan now after this. I loved that dramatic scene where Barbara just sat down for a moment. It was great XD Nice to see you using some cliches here and there. I'm really curioys as to what Barbara's next plan is. :3 |
Killthief99 chapter 3 . 5/9/2014 LOL That pokemon reference was hilarious XD I guess the nurse in Disgaea would love to see them again 'coz that's how they make money :/ Watching Barbara's tactics in trying to cure Laharl is very amusing. Tension is building up with Barbara slowly falling for Laharl! 8D |
Killthief99 chapter 2 . 5/9/2014 Hey, I'm sorry I haven't been on in a while. I am totally hyped about this story, but I guess I disappeared from fanfiction for a very long time. I've got some catching up to do :P I'm really happy that you had put my idea in there. It was really funny. AoT huh, I still haven't seen it, but plan on watching it this summer. I really like how you had Barbara's determination to follow through with her order be the first instance of her having freewill. |
Han-Ko chapter 4 . 3/5/2014 thankf for sriting this, I like this chapter XD. Hope the update is in a near future. |
Guest chapter 1 . 2/27/2014 make more plz |
disgaeafan chapter 4 . 2/26/2014 plze make it longer |
sonicgxd chapter 1 . 2/27/2014 love the story |
overlordpringerx chapter 4 . 2/25/2014 Next chapte Railier: wow you do a great Yuno Gasai impression Barbara: who is that Railier: O_o" |
girrr chapter 4 . 2/25/2014 gr8 |
MangamanZX chapter 4 . 2/25/2014 The walking in on a person bathing scene... A tired and true romantic story element... I love it! And man this romance is getting steamy... And fast :) |
duskrider chapter 4 . 2/25/2014 Nice chapter it is nice to see they are both discovering slowly whats going on. |