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I really think you should write more stuff like this cause you did it well :) I came in expecting misrakes and awkwardness cause you said it was your first time, but I was greatly mistaken. This was well-written, the characters seemed like they should/would be, and i really enjoyed it :)

awesome love the couple

Well this was nice. The way you went to all details and how you explained their story is really good, it's hard to combine lemons and history, but you did it perfectly! :}

I really liked this, thank you! And if you decide to write more for this pairing I will certainly read it, good job! :}