I'm sorry but a little bit of criticism has to go on here one legendary Pokemon can affect the entire world I don't think so not unless they're one of the alpha legendaries or one of the creation Trio or Arceus himself secondly there's no way every single Pokemon with turn on the humans and every legendary as well just no that's a lot of stuff wrong just in this first chapter that doesn't make sense

Wow. I can totally understand why Hugo volunteered. I feel kinda bad for him knowing his backstory

Not sure I buy how this system works. The Trainers are a scant few and the single line of defense of these city-states with absolutely no backup or contingency, and yet they have to pay to get more than one plate of food per day and absolutely ALL the items they use? Yeah no, that ain't no institution, that's an exploitative business that's unsustainable in anything but the very short term.

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Amazing one of my favourite story at a whole thanks for putting time and effort in the story so in other words I highly recommened this fanfiction

This... The dad asking Jacob to make up any excuse not to come visit... This is so wrong on so many levels. First off, if the dad doesn't want him to come around be man enough and tell the wife and younger son that he made the decision. Second, if mom or bro ask Jacob to come over, he has no reason to make up any other excuse.. Dad forbid me from coming. The End. That's the excuse for why he's not coming over.

I can see why you wrote it this way, because it adds an additional layer of tension to Jacob's already considerable stress levels. Besides, how many 15 y/o kids know enough about life to know when not to shoulder additional burdens? Kudos for this, because it engendered boatloads of anger at the dad and enough ire in the reader to actually write a response. Definite kudos to you!

This was an amazing story i could see it unfold right before my eyes it was like watching the best of pokemon the hunger games divergent and naruto i will read the remake as well and i say this deserves five stars

i really liked this story and i feel that you actually ended it on a good note...maybe with a few edits you could list this as complete.

I love this story and am sorry to have seen it end. I'm really drawn to the world that you created with how fleshed out and realistic it is. I'm heavily inspired to write a story in a similar setting. I will obviously change some things to make it a less borrowed idea and more inspired by, but I felt I should let you know. Anyway, this story had me on the edge of my seat the entire time with how naturally it flowed and how the pokemon used weren't the ones commonly favored by many.

It's a great story and I appreciate the work you've put in to it so far.

I am sorry that you don't have the time to finish your story. I've truly enjoyed it, it has such a unique feel and concept. I'll check out the adopted version. Good luck with everything!

I think what I'm going to say here will be repetitive of what you've seen since what's there to say has already been said, but this story was amazing, truly, and I thank you for the part of it you gave your readers.

*sigh*
Dude, seriously?

This is...disappointing... More so than the fact that I still have no idea what the main character HERE looks like...