This is a fantastic one shot. The mental stress Jaune would be under after what had happened would be immense. Keep up the good work.

You should make a full story around this, the plot you have lined up makes it really easy to have a story going and to get a good idea of where to go with it, also what you did with the characters is really good, there is a lot of emotion and development that can follow from this, I do think however if you make a full story you can flesh out the feelings and emotions some more. Overall would love to read more

You did a good job writing about this ship. I really hope you did write the full story and I will try to find it. Thank you for sharing this story

Dooo it I love this pairing. You should extend this past just a one shot there's so much more it can go

Loved the story, would definitely like to see another one with this pair.

It touched my heart. Its just really beautiful and meaningful I cried but it is a very great story hope you make more about these two they are my favorite pairing for Jaune :'-)

I love this pairing. And she's my favourite among the 4.

your writing is great and am looking forward to see you writing an actually story around this pairing. i really like the way you express the characters emotions and how smoothly the story flows and the characters grow around it. i had a great time reading this and i am hoping to read more stories from you

Really enjoyed it! Great job!

You made it work well as pairing I think you should write a stor based round Blake and jaune great one shot

wow, I enjoied it :) I do like her character the most of the 4 main

make the actual story.

Wow man. You kicked me right in my heart guts.
That was really excellently written, beautiful and sorrowful, if a bit too short and relying upon previous weight from the show to give real meaning to the events.
All in all, excellent.

I think this should just stay as a one-shot.

Damn, what started as something light turned dark way too fast! Pretty good story, I really feel bad for Jaune. I hope you do more stories someday. :)