| Reviews for Crash Landing: A Kryptonian in Asgard |
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Guest chapter 6 . 8/21/2014 Supergirl vs. Hulk! Looking forward to that one. In terms of strength I think they might be more or less matched but Kara definitely has the edge power-wise. |
Silence chapter 6 . 6/14/2014 I'm very much interested in where this story is going. It seems like there will be lots of twists and turns. I thought the idea behind Kara's introduction into the Marvel universe was really good and I like the way you write each Avengers member; they seem to be pretty much in character. However, I feel like there's something missing in the way you write Kara. I feel as though she doesn't have enough focus and/or substance. Personally, she comes across as pretty blasé about the situations she finds herself in. She's lost her planet, her people, her parents and finds herself on an unknown world surrounded by unfamiliar people. I would expect her to be feeling devastated, confused, distrustful, fearful, etc., and I think the story would benefit if you spent some time exploring these emotions in more depth. I think a good opportunity to shine some light on her character would have been her battle with Thor. In fighting, she's physically reacting to the rush of emotions she's experiencing on hearing about what happened to her planet and that would have been nice to read about. I hope you don't find that that sounds too negative. I do like this story; I think it's good and would really like to see this updated. The above suggestion is just how I think the story could to be made better than it is. |
Guest chapter 5 . 1/24/2014 Cool concept. It would be nice to see things a bit from Kara's point. I was disappointed that you skipped over Kara's apparent war with Asgard and battle with Thor. Oh well... Suggestion: try keeping things in the Marvel Universe for a bit. Having a Kryptonian there will be interesting given that they are so powerful, more so than the Avengers even. Keep up the good work and thanks! |
redhouseclan chapter 4 . 1/8/2014 Omg! I love this! Why aren't there more people reading this? So excited! Can't aait for the next chapter! Le squee! |
EvilBunny101 chapter 4 . 1/9/2014 Ah! That grammatical error has been fixed. Thank you:) Now it could just be me but every time Thor's name is said, I think of a golden lab. My friend's dog's name is Thor and I just so happen to think of him instead of Mr. Hunk! Saddening, isn't it? Great chapter! Keep it up! |
k chapter 2 . 11/21/2013 keep up the good work |
Guest chapter 1 . 11/15/2013 awsome |
km chapter 1 . 11/14/2013 please continue |
EvilBunny101 chapter 1 . 11/13/2013 Great beginning! Superman and Thor. An interesting pair. Though you did have one minor grammatical error I feel I should point out: When adding who said what at the end of the sentence, you use a comma instead of a period. For example: ("Then you are a fool." Sif stated coldly.) You would use a comma instead of that period. It would look more like this: "Then you are a fool," Sif stated coldly. Or, another example: "I hate you," Hannah interjected. Hope that helps! Good luck with the story! |
pitfal chapter 1 . 11/13/2013 not sure where the story is going, but i like it so far... superman? not sure if that works. :/ |