yeah

good

okay

Goddamnit! No matter how many times i read this i cant help but tear up. The first time i damn near balled. Idk y but this story out of all the Jori stories ive ever read hits me right in the feels more than any of them. The ending felt a bit rushed but thats okay. The way you captured the ending was perfect. Peace

okay

Good story. It was a nice build up and reveal, that I didn't see coming (despite the fact I had read many of your works before it). Some of the messages were depressing, but technically everyone is better off now. Sometimes suffering is needed to make all better. Learned that lesson after graduating high school, big time...

Corto pero lindo!

That was a wonderful story. I stayed up all night reading it. Your a really good writer!

I'm crying !

Detective Jade!

Awh ..this was a saddening cute. Its hard to explain, but I loved the story ..btw the people were out of character but still a good story! Ima Jori (JadeTori) lover forever!

KittyCat

This was AMAZING

I thought this was a very nice story.
You built suspense in the right places and only gave small bits of info at a time, creating the overall mystery-like feel.
You also wrote about Jade's loss of memory well; I'm sure how to say this, but reading your story felt different than reading typical amnesia stories. Very well done.
The one thing that got to me a little throughout the story was your grammar.
Overall, it was very good, but there were recurring things I noticed.
Ex. Don't insert apostrophes where they are not needed. Here are some examples from Ch.7:
"This was our spot. We'd watch the sunset's together here"
"You were coming to me. We'll it took a several weeks, but you finally made it.

In the first, "sunsets" should not have an apostrophe, and in the second, "Well" should not have one. Also, try playing around with the usage of commons to make it flow more.

Overall, nice job, and keep up the good work!

Loved it. :)

Hm, no idea why I haven't read this before now. Strange... Anyway, bittersweet ending. Usually when I get to the end of a fic I either am so enjoying the story that I don't want it to end or it has drained me so much that the end is almost a relief. This one was really bittersweet. The whole story was a little bit of a mystery, which I love. I'm glad you waited to reveal the text Jade never sent, it gave us something to wonder about and some sort of goal. Nicely done.
I love the way Jade's loss of memory wasn't just that, the emptiness she felt was akin to losing a loved one. She didn't know it was gone, but a part of her did; and it was missed terribly.
Such a beautiful story. I do like happy endings, but a bittersweet one is definietly more fitting.
Thanks!