PSS be proud man seriously you dont usually see oc who use wood release especially oc x naruto kind again it is rather intriguing in its own way and hope to read how hikari can probably do any elemental type justu if people taught her and her past like how her parents met or special clan its up to you but again this is a very enjoyable fic so good for you

PPSS sorry to write so much i had a lot in my mind

I know hikari is capable of overlaying chakra and know how it work just by seeing it but heres a theory for instance she already knows wood release but then she overlays that with fire creating ash or burnt wood so a new form of technique or does she have to see a jutsu in action in order to properly understand it also another theory if her chakra is naturally neutral that means it can go with any elemental chakra but more importantly im interested to see how it react with senjutsu the art of absorbing the natural chakra around therefore sage mode although i know what sage mode can be unpredictable because without the right training and the stone turning even the rinnegan preta path if directly absorb the chakra from the user will turn to stone althought exceptions can still enter sage mode albeit differently like Jūgo although he does loose his sanity it is still a form of sage mode or the curse seal uses senjutsu chakra so i am curios to see what senjutsu chakra will react with hikaris non elemental affinity so either it will react unpredictable, non reactant or something even more powerful again maybe the bats can train her or just by seeing narutos training could train herself but again if it spoils your story you dont have to tell me i am just curios how something as dangerous like senjutsu chakra will react with Hikaris chakra

PS this is just a question you could or can not answer if it spoil your story

I have to say, this is one of the better written Naruto stories I've read! It caught be very quickly! Great job and I am looking forward to more updates!

If your wondering about the kabuto using the sound 4 from his stomach that was from Itach and sasuke Vs kabuto and it was gross and cool gross cause again people face coming Out from your stomach to fight just aint right seriously again a cringed horribly

When the the whole sasuke gets taken away by the sound 4 could some of them survive cause i know their major turds in arrogance but i have a few reason why

1 we dont know much of their history other than they were prisoners and the got their butts kicked by Kimimaro
2 I cant tell whether they are loyal to orochimaru due to the curse seal, admiration, or outright fear probably the last one
3 They had a lot of potential both good and bad if they were alive
4 i dont want to see future kabuto using sakon and ukon kekkei genkai so that he can summon them from his stomach cause that was disgusting And i cringed horribly

Yeah reason Number 4 is probably the main reason why want them to live but im just saying that im not sure if they are loyal to him due to orochimaru being scary or them just wanting the curse seal kimimaro joined cause he was like haku someon who wanted a purpose in their life we have little history about the rest and that kinda seems sad or we can go canon and let them all die your choice its just maybe hikari could face off against one of the 4 or maybe theyll meet in different circumstances and sad backstory happens im not sure since the sasuke getting abducted might end up differently since hikari is changing the plot in ways i cannot imagine big or Small and cause a domino affect in the form of the plot this is strictly for suggestion if it messes up to your fic than thats fine or at least add a little back story to them again this is simply a suggestion

Great story! I hope you consider continuing it in another story!

Akira is such an unlikeable dickhead, his whole subplot feels like a waste of everyone's time. Trust and friendship is a two way thing. When the MC puts up with his annoying self, comforts him when he's throwing a tantrum, and always tries to play the peacemaker when he pisses other people off, it feels like she's a glorified doormat instead of a potential friend. There really is no sign that he actually gives a shit about her beyond needing her for the team to exist.

Well chunnin exams are up that is the first step were everything is going to change and wow thing are gonna change very fast i mean 1 they meet gaara 2 they meet team guy and im gonna laugh to death at their reaction to lee and guy 3 ibuki weird test 4 forest of death were it all began ex sasuke get curse mark, naruto gets 5 elemental seal hikari might get a seal and sakura is a ok physically mentally no 5 battle royal 6 sound and sand invasion yeah things are gonna get messed up real quickly

If Sasuke is involved, you can make Sakura mature far faster, if you let him put her in her place. He doesn't have to like Naruto, but he can call her out on her lousy performance.

Just a suggestion,

Shawn H.

LMAOOO Shikamaru, you good boi? Kid ain't subtle X'D

I feel like this story actually showacases the friendship between the naruto characters better than the canon does rarely did you see them coming together unless it was for a type of event or serious situation this was nice to see. With hikari having her own kekkai genkai and such but with such low chakra reserves id suggest her either going through some chakra training like meditation/physicsl training or her learning some chakra accumulation technique her having a kekkai genkai should make it possible for her to grow her reserves higher over time probably by the time of the timeskip or that could be one of her general weaknesses. I think mitsuki could possibly be a distant relative but im not sure or she could be a clone im not sure we'll have to see soon enough. Right now you've opened up bat summons as a possibility so thats quite the unique choice. As the chunin exams are coming up its seems time to rev up the story some more im looking forward too it. As gaara is in the village it would be wise for most of the characters to not approach him during the full moon. I've said alot like usual so if anything I'll end it with can't wait to see what you have next

This is crazy. So excited to see how Hikari and Mitsuki related, if she's her mom or sister? so many questions. The fact that she acted so unbothered, damn. Poor Hikari.

I love the way you show us how close Naruto and Hikari are. When either of them need comfort they go to each other. Also Hikari is such a gentle sweetheart, I mean the way she always says "love you" to Naruto, how she's so comfortable around him.

Nice chapter!

You introduced some interesting new characters, we got to see some potential future plot-lines with Mitsuki and it’s seems that Hikari is going to start developing new techniques.

Also, i like how your foreshadowing some potential character aspects for our ever so grumpy-softy Akira. It’s seems that he could have a knack for medicine. A grumpy, but caring Nara Medic-Nin, now that is going to be an interesting teammate.

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But that’s all again today. Much success again with everything you do, God bless and have a nice day.

Interesting story thou it does seem to have a sad start if said love interest is already 'gone' so one can hope that is not the case. But i must agree 100% that NaruHina should never have kids or a relationship. Naruto needs anything with some fire in them to ground him so here it to hoping Hikari is one such person

so many revelations in this chapter! is Hikari's summon going to be a bat? that would be so awesome, never read that before. also this Mitsuki girl. ooouu I'm so excited for the next chapter and thank you for the quick update too!