Thanks. Nice!

Good take on Canon. All the chapters has a nice twist offf Canon. Thanks

Can you two autistic assholes not follow basic rules?
Reported.

Just a head's up but you can't have two copies of the same story up at the same time. It's listed in the rules under "actions not allowed" and it's something you and bopdog111 need to deal with before you get reported and risk both of you losing this story along with all the other's you've both double posting.

Hope this helps.

Yeah, it'll be there.. in a single mind numbingly long repost LOL

well hiashi should have been killed the moment he said anything about naruto and the nine tails to hinata.

squad 6 was made up of no namers that never mattered to the story the squads for Naruto's year were 7 8 and 10

so after only 1 day as a team they get a C rank

plz keep in mind if you don't write it then it didn't happen, you are putting no passage of time

this is your passage of time, DAY 1 did 2 D rank mish's, DAY 2 get C rank mish...that is a glareing hole at this point

i'm gonna stop reading here bc there is no improvment at this point (i find it hard to belive no one pointed it out as you were writeing it), it's an intresting concept and not a bad story overall but it deffently needs to be cleaned up, i saw no grammer/spelling mistakes that i can remember, stop rushing and flesh out your world some more

so no guards around the hyuga compound to announce a vistour, you made it sound like they live in a normal house. is emo king that impolite that he can't knock on a door or something?

yes i'd say you are rushing the story, slow down and flesh it out somemore

the way you did this cliffhanger at the end was wrong, according to the way the story has gone so far they have been a team for 1 day and are already getting a C rank...i hope the next ch has some sort of passage of time before the wave mish is given so it doesn't seem like 1 day has gone by (2-3weeks need to at the least go by)

recomend putting 'x' around a thought, or doing something to it so ther reader knows it's "talking" of some form (just not "x")

you had no time go by between naruto putting up the eraser and kakashi comeing though the door, the way it reads is, he puts the eraser in the door and just as he gets done the door is opened and naruto is still standing there...just an extra line stateing x amt of time went by or even just naruto walks back to his seat. anything to show some time went by

there seems to be something off, i won't say your story is rushed but the paceing or something is off. slight rushing maybe? idk how to describe it

why was there no reaction to hiashi saying naruto was the "nine tailed boy", the mother i wouldn't expect one, but the 2 sisters should have at least asked a question of what he was talking about

What's with all the damn dialogue? Where's the descriptions and the settings?
lol I gave my review, although I shouldn't complain considering what I've done.

Okay you're getting better, it's funny I found the sequel but decided to read this story first but after the Wave arc I stopped reading because the chapters were so short and I went to another story.
I read that story and while that happened the sequel was pushed ahead by stories uploaded after it. I found it again and decided to give this one another chance. I'm glad I did because like I said you're getting better.

You actually made it more interesting breaking a way from the usual prelims except for Shino vs Zaku.

Okay... Where's the sequel?

Stuff has hit the floor.