I read the summary and was instantly interested in your fanfiction. I'm glad I clicked on the link because I loved this story.
I'm a huge fan of Red Dead Redemption, and I have been looking for a good fanfiction to read about this category. Some of the other fanfictions on this board haven't really interested me at all.

The bond you have created between Jack and John was so sweet, and I really believed that they truly loved each other as father and son.
Every part was vivid and I knew what was going on at all times. The characters were all correct in the way they act and their dialogue. This is one minor detail I liked though, is that you named all the towns they went too, and the fact I recognized each one of them. XD

However, these some things I have to point out.

Please try and separate your paragraphs, because they had so much detail in them, I got mixed up in the lines.
Also, there are some spelling errors, but that's nothing major. ;)
You need to know the difference between; there, their and they're.

Anyway, I loved your story and will be looking out for your work in the future.

P.S. Please make another story to follow up on this one.

-Writer of Imagination

I love it so much I can't help but read it over and over again.

I told you they should have a sequel !

Another great addition to this story! I'm really hoping John will live through this. I can't wait for the next update. The only thing I kind of want to point out is that, in chapter 8 and a little in the beginning of chapter 9, you switched from pass tense to present tense a lot. Just make sure you watch that and make sure you stick with the tense the story is in. That's all really. Update soon!

Whoa, awesome chapter! I hope John stays alive. Please update soon!

Wow!Now I am sure that i was seen by a great fanficer!You'r realy good!

Such a wonderful fanfic. I'm hoping to see an update soon.

...this isn't really the best possible kind of text I've seen, but it has a logical and an interesting plot. Also, there isn't very much fanfics about Undead nightmare (or really just RDRedemption) that would be so very good, so this is an amazing thing to read, even for me who doesn't usually read 'sequel' fanfiction.
You've got a good grammar and I barely find the characters OOC at all, I really like the way you write everything...it's almost perfect.

I hope this fic doesn't end too soon, this kind of high-quality text is a lovely thing to read.

Great update! Keep up the great work!

This is great! I love John and Jack stories and I love John and Bonnie stories so this is perfect! I thought the bonding between john and jack in chapter 1 and 2 were so sweet. And I love the emotion john shows when he finds out jack has become an outlaw. Not too sure how I feel about your OFC Sofia but I'm guessing she's supposed to be kinda like a Luisa replacement? Just assuming lol. In chapter 7 I liked how you showed John giving into his hunger, because I was actually wondering; if he's an undead wouldn't he have a hunger for humans? I'm glad you tied that up. I'd have to say you don't have very many loose ends: everything seems to be accurate and believable. Your grammar and spelling is good and you seem to know where the story is going. I will definitely continue to follow this story, it's so precious. If I were to give any advise, it would be to make sure Sophia doesn't become Mary Sue. Not that she is, but I see there potential for it. Whenever there is an OFC, that risk is always there unfortunately. I can't wait for the update!

Thanks for updating! I got scared 'cause I thought you weren't going to update. Keep up the good work!

When I first started reading this, I thought I was gonna suck, I'm sorry. But as I read through it, I realized this story has great potential. I hope you add more to this wonderful story.

This is an awesome fanfic! When I first started reading it and saw that you hadn't updated in a while, I got sad cause this fanfic has great potential. I'm so happy you updated and please don't forget about this fanfiction! Please update soon!

Im looking forward for the next chapter i hope you update.