Yay. I got a kiss. Everybody calls me Lucy at my school so I always love it when me and Natsu kiss

I love this! It was so adorable! Make more!

I'm just going to say that I hope these tips help you improve for example

You should be alot descriptive over the characters, places, what they say, looks, sounds, taste,like,hear and Etc and when your starting a conversations you need to indent then you need to capitalize the first word for ex:
"Hello, my name is Bob," he greeted, "What's your name."

And exclamation parentheses comma periods etc should be inside the parentheses.
Also realize how Bob greets himself and starts a new sentence u need a comma not a period

"Hello, my name is Bob,(" he greeted, " What's your name.")

And also try making a new challenge for your self. You can never use said in the story try something else for ex: replied exclaimed cried yelled hollered yelped screamed happily exclaimed cheered smirk thanked and etc

cute!

I love this... Alot... (Excuse me while I go burst into fan girl-seizure)