hey author it's supposed to be I pity the fool! Jk.

Contestant#16 X-23! X-23 for the win! :)

Good luck with the rewrite. Great job.

update this soon

I really love how you quote from other pieces of fiction

The first chapter and a half you should not of done because if we are reading the story we most likely no Spiderman‘s origin story. Also Cerebro can detect Spiderman mutated DNA but just faintly

this is a good story

please bro update this story

I really like this till Gwen replaced spider Man T.T

You got it!

still missing some words

So I guess you're a fan of amazing Spider-X.

Sorry I probably came off as a b*tch and very rude. I love your story ideas and I like your stories it's just I hate grammar mistakes. It is probably due to having an uncle who is a English teacher and an aunt who is a publisher. Sorry about the monkey comment I just watched The Pirates of the Caribbean and it was stuck in my head. You do have a lot of potential just work on your grammar when you have time. I get finding people to help is hard and would offer, but I barely have enough time off work and college as is. Most likely I will still read your stories I was just frustrated with something else and seeing the grammar set me off. Keep up the good work and I will read when I can.

I like the idea of the story, but can't and will not read past chapter 4 until you clean up your grammar. You have the potential to be a good writer, but as of now your grammar makes your writing seem like a semi sentient half dead monkey wrote the story.

Is Peter going to use his telepathy to tamper with everyone's memory except for the xmen, gwen and aunt may in order to keep his identity a secret?