Do you still have your other story? Did u delete it? Please tell me you didn't. I've been looking for a story like this that I read last year (it was on a school iPad so I couldn't check, because I had to give it in at the end of the year). I think the other one was it. Anyways, this is still really good!

Well that was a little sudden. Please don't be like almost everybody and abandom this story

Ok I just want to say that I hate it when authors skip years in the middle of the story. Also I would not like to see Cynder die especially sine she's Gravid (pregnant) use Gravid instead of pregnant. Also be realistic here how can any dragon best both Spyro and Cynder together? Only someone stronger than Malefor.

Having similar ideas myself

I'm interested to see what way this will turn. Keep it up.

well this chapter was very nice, but it was really rushed. all and all, it was alright.

Your a good writer and I liked reading this so far but I would like to see this story continued so could you please make that happen and thank you for your time

I think you should continue the story, BUT not until you get over your depression. im sure that every one else how like this story would agree that you should worry about your self before this story. unless writing helps wit your depression I think that you should take care of yourself. I will keep an eye out for the next chapter/story (if there will be a new one that is)

well what you have is very interesting, and for the most part this was a decent chapter. the only real problem I had with this chapter was that the classes were very short. as soon as they have started they end. the time spent in one of the classes doesn't need to be lengthened, but maybe instead just put something that moves the focus to a different class, but doesn't just end the class that we were currently reading about if that makes sense.

im not as confused this time with this chapter compered to the last chapter, but im still a little confused. why did Terrador have toys with him? it was never announced that he was going to bring them toys, and from what we the readers know no one asked Terrador to bring them toys, he just came towards them and happen to have toys with him. that is very confusing. other then that like I said before this story is still a bit rushed. I did however find the idea of Tailtoss ball to be very creative, so good job there.

I will be honest, I was very confused with this chapter. first of all what was the deal with the guardians? they seem to be arguing about something, but it is never addressed what they were arguing about. secondly when did Ashen turn invisible? thirdly why was there mole in there room? I understand that the mole was there to make them food, but were in the world did he come from? he just appeared out of know were. fourthly why doesn't Spyro understand why Cynder cuddles with him when they sleep? they both admitted that they love each other so obviously she does it because she loves him. I am just at a complete lost here.

like the last chapter, this one was also, decent. however I see two problems here. the first one was the beginning. when I first read it, I thought that some one in reality was talking, and not a dream. this is really easy to fix just put something in bold lettering like "inside Spyro's dream" or put type the words in Italic. the other problem I see with this story so far, is that it is rushed. you don't stay in one place to long, and when you do go to a new place little is said. if at all possible, try to make the dialog longer. still this story is all right. it does need some work, but seeing as this is your first story you did a good job.

well for your first story ever written, you did decent job. the only problem I saw with this chapter however was in the very beginning. in the beginning, you put that they were asleep for hours, so I thought that they were only asleep for a few hours, but then later in the chapter you put they haven't eaten in days. other then that, like I said you did a decent job.