I just love how Dean and Seth I like when they making love together really really doing it I just love how they doing it.

This is such an adorable and sweet story

Finally seth is on top

wonderful! somehow I missed this before, but Im glad I found it :)

I would pay good money to see Dean Ambrose wearing Seth's tight pants, reow haha I thoroughly enjoyed this ( like everything else you write lol)

Damn those yellow shirts! I think seeing them in each other's clothes would be hilarious. Can't decide if it'd be hot or weird. They would have to model them for me to decide. The sexy fun times were definitely hot. It was nice to see the role reversal there. I think it's sweet Dean never asked for that before because he was too worried about taking care of Seth. What a sweetie. And Seth did a good job topping. Go Sethie! Great work.

I've read a lot of your work, and like it, but never reviewed before. Hopefully you don't think I am too harsh.

For me, was a decent story marred by some poor writing.

I found your word choices were repetitive - you used the words "hard," "harder," "Dean's ass" (including his "waiting" and "beet red" ass), and "moan" a lot in this story. It was pretty distracting.

Your dialogue, as always, is good, but your sentence construction outside of that is just awkward. When I read the sentence that starts "Seth walked out of the bathroom..." aloud, it just didn't sound natural. Same goes for most of your descriptive sentences: they either run on or just straight don't flow.

I see variations of "exploded his release" quite often in your stories. It's not only *not* a sexy image, it's also clumsy. There's nothing wrong with saying "he came all over his fist and belly." No, it's not as punchy as "exploding," but it's clearer and doesn't sound as clunky. With strong enough description around it, you can still convey that intensity.

"Begging cock." I think you should treat that "weeping cock" and just avoid it. Same with "waiting ass". (How does a cock beg, anyway? And if you're writing this from Seth's perspective, how does he even know Dean's cock *is* begging? Is he some sort of Cock Whisperer? If that's the case, cool. Otherwise, I'd skip it.)

There's a lot more I found - your last paragraph (rushed and messy), the phrase "he pumped his cock in and out of Dean" (featuring another unsexy image and awkward construction), and so on - but I'll just leave it at I liked the concept, the dialogue was good, and you write Seth better than just about anybody.

A good beta reader could help you sand down the rougher edges and really make your work shine.

Sorry this was so long and I hope I didn't offend you.

Cheers. -Gia

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Teh feelz Dean...I haz dem too

holy shit im fucking reeling right now because this is absolute perfection and everything i ever wanted. TO BE HONEST I PROBABLY LOVED IT TOO MUCH. LIKE HOLY SHIT. gah you are perfect and the way you write these two is just as well if not somehow more. great job xoxo