And even more PER-FEC-TION! Loved BOTH of these! Thank you so much!

This was great, I loved the wanting to roll the eyes because is their bromance that epic really. Oh funny. I especially loved the hand touching part at the end, whop! It always get me how just reading something so chaste like that get my heart fluttering. Another winner. Cheers

OH MY GOSH. I am grinning so hard I probably look like an idiot. I couldn't help fangirling during this AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME oneshot...because it is GORGEOUS. I love love love love love love love love love love love your writing!Aaahhh!
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The bromance mention was hilarious and spot-on. Those two went from at each other's throats (literally) to bosom buddies and it's too awesome not to love. XD

Thanks for writing and sharing. I enjoyed Snow's interaction with Hook. You don't see too much of that in fanfiction.

Beautiful. Not much else can I say because I think this is perfect. Fantastic job! :))

nice

{grins} Delightful one for Snow and Hook to talk about Emma. I like that you don't have Snow or Charming trying to push Neal on Emma. That just didn't feel right to me on the show. It doesn't even have much to do with the fact that I am a Captain Swan fan. Neal was with another woman even when Emma found him again. It doesn't feel right to just switch to Emma and expect it all to be hunky dory.

I loved this . I like how you pointed out that villains aren't born their bred through bad things happening to them. I also like how you noted that Captain Hook and Killian Jones while the same person are different at the the same time.I also like how you mentioned the relationship between Emma and Hook . She acts like she is annoyed with i'm by his jokes but you know its their way of flirting .

and this was even better than David's POV

Haha...Mama Snow's no fool...she knows what's going on and as you've pointed out, since she hasn't exactly turned Killian into a pincushion, she doesn't entierly disapprove.

That aside, I like how you've shown that both Killian and Emma can be quite stubborn when they want to be...and even when they don't lol

Again, I think repetition is the biggest thing you need to look out for in order to improve your writing considerably. Not just with names, but with other words and phrases too. Repetition by itself will cause a reader to become bored and lose interest but if you largely avoid it, you can then use it to strengthen a piece.

Otherwise this is very well written. Great job!

Oh, this story was so 'intimate' almost, the way Snow's observations were written. It's amazing, great job!

That was great! These two one shots are killing me though. I need more.

Love it!

I love this! Fantastic!

wow! This story is amazing! I got really emotional, I really want an emotional snow interaction with hook as much as I want an emotional Emma interaction with Charming which is a lot!