Why would anyone kill Deeks off i donot like that story. Now please fix it

I dont like this story, deeks DYING! Noo way! I cried for ten minutes then reminded myself that he isnt dead :p lol...nice writing, very emotional,you are one hell of a writer.

LOVE IT good job

The first 3 chapters were pretty heart-wrenching, but this one not as bad, which is a good change. To be honest it felt a bit 'tacked-on', as if you didn't intend to include it when you started writing. It's not a bad chapter, but it does feel a little disjointed.

I also have to wonder why she would pick Max for the baby's name. That's the one alias in particular that Deeks hated, so I can't imagine she would name their son that. Maybe it's just me, but I would sooner have seen her name their son Donald, or Dom, or even Mike, but not Max.

Sooo good. I like angst stories. It's not weird

OMG you are such a great story maker love love love love love love love love is! Hey make where kensi dies

ok, then, this chapter also truly amazing.
I do not particularly like when one of them gets hurt, or gets killed, but really with these chapters I have totally stolen the attention, they are written really well and in such a way that, although very sad, I can not read , and every time you add one, my cuire beats waiting to find what you wrote.
Now, I do not know if you're going to go, but I would throw at a kind of challenge, if you do not mind, I would like to ask you if you want and if you have time to write a story parallel to this, but where is Kensi to be killed; I'm too brutal you say?
I love how transmit the feelings of the two of them, and I'd like to see how you would react Deeks.
Anyway I will continue to read, you almost certainly will not be able to review this forever, or how this time, I'll do at the end of the fic, but be sure, always, always read!
Hello! Lou

This definitely tore my heart out! I started crying halfway through and can't stop!
Your writing is so beautiful :)

:'( aww

Très bien écrit. Mais j'aimerais que ce ne soit qu'un cauchemar et qu'elle se réveille !

Heart wrenchingly beautiful...

wow that was traumatic
sad & angsty
fabulous story

Sorry. Time jumps are very frustrating. I understand you marked this as "dark fic", but it should have said "major character death" - this way I would have avoided it altogether.

Why, why must you bring this absolutely mortifying NIGHTMARe into the realm of possibilities! its equivalent to the apocalypse of ALL NCIS LA Densi endings

Wow, I am very impressed, not only at the way you wrote the rest of the story, which was fantastic by the way, but also that you resisted using some Deus ex machina to get Deeks out of the situation. A lot of writers probably would have caved, and so kudos that you didn't.

I also think the characterizations all around were great (Granger was a *little* over the top suspending her, but yeah I could see him doing that). When I read that Sam wrapped his arms around her and picked her up to prevent her from seeing Deeks, I almost cheered at how that was exactly what I would expect him to do. Callen stepping in next to finally get her to stop, in effect the team coming together, was also great. Eric and tearful Nell. And what can we say about Hetty? She's Hetty.

Very well done. Thank you for sharing it with us.