I really enjoyed this. Really well done. Thank you.

This is awesome! Is there a way to make it a full length story? Fantastic! Thank you for posting this!

Interesting...

I adored this one shot, although I typically avoid anything written in third POV. That being said, you took me on a magical adventure, then ripped my bloody, still-beating heart from inside my chest. I possibly cried at the end, and I refuse to believe the hidden seam doesn't exists. It exists. I know it. Good luck in the contest!

This was really well written, original and you made a nice song choice. However, you dropped the ball on the sex. I loved it up until and after that point. It was so rushed. Sex needs to be drawn out to draw a reader in, otherwise the story gets thrown off balance and leaves it unsatisfying. Everything else was great, though. Perfect dialogue, good banter. You really made the reader think.

This was just so magical and witty and smart and funny, cute and very, very sad all at the same time. Does he exist? Is he just a delusion? The whole thing blows your mind and the end makes you think, wonder if magic and the seam truly exist or could she now stay forever for another, much more likely reason ... You are truly an amazing individual for coming up with this. The song choice was just as original and different as the story.
Good Luck!

This oneshot is awesome, really hope you decide to continue this!

I really like this. So different, and unique. Great job.

Wow, this was so original. Great job and good luck!

Wow - I haven't been so completely transported by a work of fiction since I read Ursula Le Guin as a teenager. You totally took me to a different world - incredibly impressive for such a short piece. Only negative was that there were a few places where you shifted from past to present tense, which I wasn't sure was intentional, as I found it distracting more than effective. I wish I had your gift for setting. At the beginning I was thinking how vividly you had captured the aura of Maine. The twist of them traveling in a circle made your other word have geography, not just scenery. Well, well, done.

Wow, I loved this story. I'm a big fan of the fantasy-genre, and this is right up my alley. And the ending was so tragic and yet genious (in my understanding she really was mad, and retreated into her own mind for good in the end).

interesting and unusual..i like it :) thanks for sharing.

Wow... that was different. Amazing, but different. Would love to see this expanded.

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Great story. Thanks for the HEA