What kind of shit fic is this?, disappointing. With too much oc focus plus him being op which is heavy overused , get a life bitch

Mc is honestly a beta lol I thought he was strong when he fought Headon but he isn’t lll Mary Sue? The dude isn’t strong it’s pathetic

Just read the authors notes that Mc won’t be the only magus from Fate that is in the tower... well he isn’t original anymore and it isn’t a good read sooooooo DROPPPPPP DROP DROP DROP DROP TRASH

The laughing in this fanfic is awful. The writing is all over the place and you can’t tell who is speaking so again it’s awful. The members of his team are just awful. This should’ve never been written.

Was good until you added this other character... if he doesn’t shut up or die in the next chapter is a QUICK DROP

wew lad

I am getting desperate please update

Who the fuck is this gary stu called aaron?

It's 2015 already and I have already reread this a couple of times. Please Update...

I like Aaron and I am curious of his unnatural origin

I really want to know where did you got the idea for Aaron's face. I just can't picture it. Any F/S night fan here who knows?

It's a great read... I really want to see more

Story is inconsistent as fuck. It sucks ass

Your protagonist is certainly dislikable. But that's not the problem-he's not dislikable in an interesting or sympathetic way. He's not clever or intelligent, brave or resourceful. He doesn't produce memorable one-liners or have anything interesting to say (even with that golden subordinate role that had so much comedy potential). His fighting style is repetitive and somewhat dull. And perhaps most damning of all, he doesn't seem to grow as a characters, even after nine chapters. You would think I would feel something for him after reading this far, but I feel nothing but ambivalence. If he died in the next chapter I wouldn't care one bit.

There's nothing wrong with trying to usurp the plot with an original character, but he doesn't particularly feel like a protagonist that's a part of the story playing out in the background. He's a dull character mostly trapped in his own mind and driven by his own rules leaving nothing hanging out for a reader like myself to latch onto.

That's it for me, happy writing!

This was a cool chapter. I liked seeing Serena from Leesoo's point of view. It gave a new flavour to the canon plotline.
But the highlight of the chapter for me was definitely Aaron's shaky relationship with Chunhwa. It's an interesting duo, and I'd like to see more interactions between them. Even though Aaron probably isn't going to change because of Chunhwa, Chunhwa might think that Aaron could change.
The scene with the Guardian was also notable as well. I'll remember it.
You're writing Aaron's POV well and how he views the other regulars, mainly Chunhwa and Koon.
Keep it up.

Awesome! Thanks for the update! I look forward to seeing the day Aaron challenges a Guardian that's not Headon!

I especially liked the opening dialogue, since it opens up more mysteries concerning Aaron. Keep it up!