This was published quite a while ago, but oh well.

First off, your writing is good! There weren’t many spelling errors and it’a not too stuffy. It’s also not too formal, nor is it too casual.

I do have a problem though, unfortunately. I’m not going to criticize you for following the story just like it is, unlike other reviews. Coming up with new material to fit an already existing story is hard. Besides, the entire point is romance, which you have achieved in your writing.

What i dislike is Cat.
- She’s not horribly written, and far from the worst character i’ve read about. My problem with her is that she’s, like other reviews are mentioning, a wallflower. She doesn’t really interact with the story or the characters that much.
- Another problem i have with her is that she’s almost too perfect. I think we could all relate to her more if she showed her flaws, small flaws. She doesn’t have to get someone killed, but let her at least miss a shot once in a while.
- Now this might be more about my personality not really lining up with Cat’s, but i’m still adding it in. In one of the first few chapters, Cat talks about being a tomboy and preferring men for friendship, which is totally fine! However, it later develops into racking down on girls. It gives me kind of a «i’m not like other girls» vibe. What she basically says is «girls are too much drama!» Being feminine and having female friends does not take away from her being a badass :)

I’m sure you and your writing have developed, just thought i’d share. All in all, it’s a good story, and you should write how you want.

You literally just have Caterina do and know everything, everyone else pretty much become useless blobs; that's just irritating. She sees everything that is gonna happen, knows everything that's gonna happen. If someone did something badass or important, Caterina now does it...except for Daryl of course. I like strong female OCs, but she has way too much going for her: military experience, fastest runner, good tracker, overly observant, learns to use a crossbow insanely quickly...and that's just off the top of my head. The only drawbacks we see are an aversion to heights (not fear) and a fear of needles, the latter being nothing in this world.

I am gonna read on, and hope that some cracks appear in her. Maybe I shouldn't have read this, military OCs tend to be a no no for me; it's not as interesting when they're ready for anything that happens. And like someone else put, this seems to have been made to pair someone with Daryl, and not have a developing post-apocalyptic story.

ok at chapter 24 i can honestly say u are sticking to canon with a wall flower oc. Nothing is changed, she barely speaks out unless its to hold daryl back and has a bleeding heart for every prisoner they take. She is military she of all ppl should know how dangers humans are. I tried but this sucks, I didnt like the canon to begin with but adding cat just makes it that much more frustrating stupid. So many things that could change if there was just one more person that had skill yet when u add ur oc with military training she just makes it worse since it turns out the same making her completely useless. A useless wall flower that barely speaks up aka Cat.

So your OC is very passive and for having military experience is acting like a noob. Are u gonna stay on canon and have cat act as a wall flower? Cause that pretty much what its been just standing around and acting like a noob. Guess only way to find out is to read to the next major canon plot and hope you do something exciting with your character instead of telling the TWD story through a wall flowers eyes.

Was hoping for a tough chick, so far she doesnt notice a guy walking up, wouldnt want her as a lookout. So useless right there. and then shifts nervously? Yep Chapter 1 and the OC is starting out as a useless woman already, by all cliche standards but thanx for writin none the less. Not trying to be harsh with my review im getting extremely annoyed trying to find a strong female lead that isnt clumsy, in la la land (like urs when she doesnt pay attention) blushes every chapter, or better yet to keep realistic, no blushing at all. Most grown women do not blush like a virgin geek being talked to by the quarter back.

I'm going to give your story a try. I almost stopped in the first chapter when I read that your heroine could easily shoot a crossbow and then went on to quote an impossible statistic for a crossbow, even on a shooting range. In order to even scratch a paper target at 180 yards you would need to have "god like powers" according to . effective kill range for the power even the very best bow on the market, in new condition for the longest shot is about 80 yards. The scope is only useful up to 40-50 yards, after that you are completely dependent upon experience. A person would have to have been shooting for some 15-20 years to land an 80 yard shot even close to target because a crossbow bolt drops more for each foot traveled forward the further it gets from the shooter.
That last bit is from .
Now, I myself have never shot a crossbow, I'm a recurve bow girl myself because I'm well below the average 5'10" to 6' a person has to be to have long enough arms to pull either a crossbow or a compound bow. (There's a reason archers are tall especially using a crossbow since the tensile strength of the bowstring is enough to peel the skin off of your arm if you can't hold it properly.) Even having someone else pull one for me would be no good because the scope of a weapon depends upon the height of the user for it's accuracy. This is why a scope has to be adjusted on a projectile weapon so often. There are a massive number of variables involved for accuracy and each new weapon (even moving between models of the same weapon) and your character would need supernatural powers to make the shot you mentioned as I said earlier, but I'm in the mood to read about superwoman and your style is pleasant. In addition I'm interested to see how you think the plot would change if Rick had a more experienced (in the evasion of walker's) person at his side during the first part of his journey. Surely together they would avoid many of the pitfalls he came into because he didn't really know the lay of the land so to speak.

Really debating on whether or not to continue this. I don't like fics that evolve around romance, and that seems to be why this fic was made - to pair someone with Daryle. I know it's unfair of me to assume this, but nothing has changed except some stuff the oc noticed or did that someone else noticed or did in the original. I'm really not willing to waste my time reading something of this length that doesn't change a damn thing besides adding a new character that ends up in a relationship to someone who she was designed for (yes, that crossbow she has ticks me off because come on, BE ORIGINAL). That said, I like this story because it seems the romance isn't going to happen for awhile (yay character development!), the main character (Cat) acts like a real person (I like her, she's cool), and there's hardly any grammar or spelling mistakes that I can point out at this time. I really like Cat, which is really unfortunate since it's hard to find good quality OCs on here due to wish fic romances (curse you Daryle and your ability to attract the opposite sex!). It's also frustrating to watch her good qualitiness go to waste because she's not really doing anything besides being a romance interest (that I know of, can't forget to give you props for this fics length and for admittedly judging before reading the whole thing, sorry about that, I really am). This isn't a flame or anything, or even meant to insult or offend you. I am, admittedly, somewhat taking my frustration out on you. I am so tired of characters being so focused on romance that it's stories and the potential of their characters suffer. One more chapter, then we'll see.

Never mind, I take it back, she is thinking (beginning of next chapter), but her smile at the end of this chapter made me angry.

Well, there goes my interest. No offence. I was kinda hoping her caring nature would make her help Merle instead of leaving him. Alas, she seems to not care. I was also hoping for some more character development if she helped him...well not everyone can be creative and change plot to make things interesting (I for one, know I can't. Well, I can but I won't have the drive or determination to continue). Well, hopefully this was just not the place where you wanted to diverge, but hopefully it isn't passed the part where Sofia dies cause I always cry when she does. I prefer fix-it fics I suppose lol

I like this girl, although I have some issues with the plot, being that the only thing changed was her pointing out what Rick did in the original. I am holding out hope for her stating behind to help Merle. Not THAT much hope since you seem to be sticking really close to cannon, but decent enough.

burning is better. its a contamination rule so the virus doesn't go underground to the groundwaters and so the land is clean to work on

I really want to love this story because I like the idea of your OC, but so far, though your writing is decent, I feel like Cat adds nothing to the story and a lot if the time it's just a word by word account of the episodes as a viewer and she doesn't add anything to most of the scenes. And when she does do or say something, it's usually just what Rick would have said or done, so it feels like you have two half characters vying for the same place within the group.
I'm still going to continue reading and hope that Cat develops more in to her own character that brings something different in to the story though.

Ohhhhhh Dayum!

I love it

Catharina seems like a great character and more used to violence than others.
Merle is the same idiot has always.
Great chapter