All I have to say is that this is one of the best fanfics about warshipping I've read and that I hope to one day be at your level of writing.

This chapter made me cry. This story has been excellent so far! Now, after I pull myself together, I'm going to continue to the next chapter.

That was so glorious.
I really have to offer props for the way you handled the things like PTSD and Seto's issues. You did so in a manner that - particularly for a fanfiction - were reasonable.
This has been one of the best-written fanfictions that I have ever read. And I just died when I checked your profile and saw that there was a sequel. Hurray!

So my girlfriend has been reading me your second story and i decided to finally finish this one lol i love your stories they actually make me hard core feel for these two lol

I was holding off posting a review until I've read the story in its entirety, and now I can say with certainty that I absolutely love it. I like how you handled this pairing; the amount of realism that you put into it. You deserve so many kudos for that! I like your take on them and their interactions.

That said, there were a few minor things slightly amiss - notably grammar. (According to your profile, I presume that English is your second language.) Your apostrophes were sometimes in the wrong place, there were a few sentences - notably in the latest chapters - that had missing sections, and sometimes you had a wrong word used - one that sounds right, but is spelled differently. The latter, I assume, might have happened when you ran spellcheck in Word - not always the first word in the list of suggestions is the right one.
And while we're on the subject - you have the meanings of 'former' and 'latter' confused. 'Former' is used when you refer to the first option(s) of several; latter - when you refer to the last one(s).

I would point out specific examples to the slight grammar slip-ups (because I know how annoying it is when a review mentions that there were 'a few errors here and there' without specifying anything so I could go and fix them - coincidentally, the same thing I'm doing right now), but this is supposed to be a review instead of a correction of mistakes. That said, I am more than willing to sit down with this fic and go mistake-hunting for you, if you would like. :) (Hey, I get to reread a good story! That's always a plus.)

Another slight issue that I had was with Noa's birthday. Canon says it's November 7, actually.

One more thing that made this story look somewhat cluttered was the absence of scene breaks. I assume you had some symbols or perhaps extra large spaces breaking up the text when the action shifted from one scene to another, but this site strips out many special symbols and all extra lines. You have to add all section breaks back in with the editor - which is a bit of a hassle, I'll be the first one to admit that.

I'm quite sure I had some other thoughts while reading this story, but I've forgotten all about them now. Truly, though, I cannot express how much I appreciate the realistic portrayal of their relationship; the mindfulness and foresight you put into crafting the situations and their respective reactions to them. It's something very rarely seen in fic, and especially so for these two characters.

This was an enjoyable read. Thank you!

It was a pleasure :)

Yyyaaaaaayyyyyyy! Well played my friend very well played. Youve done so fabulously building up to this chapter. I was grinning the whole way through. Even their conversation was right on par with wht needed to be said. Plus as far as the show goes I think that really is how they would d feel about each other if they actually hooked up. I think you met your mark with things they were classy haha I like tht term. I really am sad to her that thia t

bSo I really just want to high light a few thigs I feel you'v don really well with through out the story.
First off that coat thing that keepa coming up is really well thrown into the mix. I love it. Its so romantic nd selfless especially considering how much Kaiba loves his expensive coats.
Second the progression with Seto expressing his feelings. Especially when he says " I love you too". And the way he opens up to Alister about his parents. Lets also not forget how he comforts Alister. Above all I love the way he takes care of him..
I really do have more points to cover but alas my puppy Jackal demands attention lol

I cant even count how many times Ive quoted ghat cocaine line to Chichi its freaking hysterical. Dudeoverall i think this was one of your most hysterical chapters yet. Kaibas watching porn and calling Alister a slut absolutely ridiculous

I was curious from the chapter with Mokuba wayyyyy before if you'd ever put them both on the bike and end up back up on the mountain. It's a nice change of pace to finally have Seto's feelings coming out, his REAL feelings. God he apologized.

So really Chichi is behind on reading this but that doesn't stop me from quoting lines from it. Really I don't know how she hasn't killed me yet with frustration for the things I do involving this story haha.

Needless to say you should do a sequel.

You're really good at putting the best line of the whole chapter at the end. Kuddos!

1. Thank you for not having Mokuba have sex.
2. Nice work on finally separating the Seto from the Kaiba.

That little race in the pool was ssoo ridiculous. I can't imagine it going any other way. Alister pulls a technicality that makes it seem like hes cheating but hes really clearly not.

You really have gotten to the comfort part of things. I'm excited to catch up on the new chapters. Oh by the way so I'm officially creepy... atleast thats what Chichi keeps saying. I have the perfect time of checking my phone and always seem to catch a new chapter with in the first 3 hours.

I really don't think I've ever met more than one or two people in my whole life that couldn't be bought. Anyway...

Dude I never liked Maude, although I don't feel you ever really made her to be liked, more of just a foil to Trudy in a sense. She basically raped Seto -_- or attempted to anyway.

You did really well with the umm... reunion? of the two once they get back to the normal world. They fought but not in some absurd way that makes me wanna pull my hair out. It was perfectly played out for how those two are.

Hun everything you're doing with this story is great, absolutely positively! Just keep doing what you're doing.

I love the humor at the end of this between them about criticizing lifestyles lol. I'm just so happy they are finally back together and Alister isn't like dying somewhere ya know?

Poor Mokuba probably didn't do much sleeping compared to the other two. God I still can not get over th fact that he actually went and got him and found him in a hospital.

...but it is such a lovely "comfort" part :)

I like everything about this story. Yes, really! I was afraid itd become stuck in the "h" part of "h/c" but it didnt. I like that it takes them patience to get anywhere resembling a normal relationship and there is no magical healing **** in sight b/c thats who they are. I like that Seto is a stubborn a******e and that Alistair is forever ever-confused. Id encourage you not to worry about connecting and suggestions and such and just enjoy yourself when writing, just as much as we enjoy reading this :D