I just found and am reading your story for the first time now..I like it very much so far, I think you are a good writer, but what you did in chapter 25, telling the story from Kim's point of view was really great! I don't think I have ever read something like this before, and thoroughly enjoyed it. Well done :)

SAY, KNOW ANYONE WILLING TO COME UP WITH A STORY BASED ON THIS SHIt?

- 'Beware the Superman' Trope
- Fallen Hero (Malin Rydén)
- Irredeemable (Mark Waid)
- Kingdom Come (Mark Waid)
- Lady Justice (Ken Ogino)
- Marshal Law (Pat Mills)
- Planetary (Warren Ellis)
- Powers (Brian Michael Bendis)
- Rising Stars (J. Michael Straczynski)
- Squadron Supreme (Mark Gruenwald)
- Supreme (Rob Liefeld)
- Supreme Power (J. Michael Straczynski)
- The Boys 2019 (Eric Kripke)
- Watchmen (Alan Moore and Dave Gibbons)

Emphasis on Fallen Hero (Malin Rydén), Irredeemable (Mark Waid), Kingdom Come (Mark Waid), Lady Justice (Ken Ogino) and The Boys 2019 (Eric Kripke).

Finally his balls dropped.

Wait, are your omakes canon? I haven't read a single one since omakes are, as far as I've ever seen, non-canon, nonsensical, or completely irrelevant to the story. Would be great if they are canon for you to label them so.

Anyway, great story... your insanely good writing skills are the only thing that kept me in the story this time, I had read some years ago when the latest chapter was just about to leave the Hun camp, but the darkish tone of the story scared me away from Following. Your story is extremely under viewed due to the fact nobody checks these categories, I only found it through searching for "pokegirl".

I had to afk so I've forgotten what main points I wanted to deliver...oh well, since your writing skills are so high level I wanted to give a little recommendation to cut down as much AN as possible in the future story, as nice as your review responses were they take something away from a story, not really sure how to say it in a convincing manner that doesn't sound privileged...but making your story look as professional as possible isn't meaningless

As for actual story I'm interested in where Sakuya will go, seeing as she feels kind of like a Mary-sue given her undying loyalty and the little quirk where she was obviously intended from the start to go down the Nogitsune. She just felt like she belonged in a generic harem FF compared to your other characters, you know? Kind of refreshing now that I mention it lol.

I could go on forever about my personal feelings on the story but I don't want to make this too long since I suck at writing my thoughts down with brevity, looking forward to part 2, peace.

I have only one complaint about this story it being the ending chapter it seem kinda open no cliffhanger or final conflict not even a hint as to what is up

for the most part I love the self incert and am so happy to find you didn't marysue the hero to much

Great series.

great story so far.

I love your story,I hope your life gets better. I want you to know that I noticed the change of hands when Mario acted differently in the last 2 chapters when he wasn't partially horrified by what he did to (Sukuya)I know I misspelled her name.)Because of his lack of self hate and outer grief,and/or lack of trying to mend things with non withstand. Also the fact that he was almost always mad. Hope this helps kudos to you a fan.

Kudos to you made me laugh when fisting kangasscunt hahaha

The prodigal child returns. You broke my heart by leaving, now you've returned! YAY! They say "Hope for the Best and Expect the Worst". In your case its "Hope for the Best and Expect even Better"

(get your sh*t together mario)

I ment Jade's somewhat growing emotional range considering she was recently L5'd and her dealing with Mario contradicting her programing. In hind sight though, Jades physical range of motion is dificult to describe so kudos to you. Regardless, it's good to have you back!

*is sparring with Lilith, using a sheathed blue tinted sword against her staff in a spar in agility and speed*

Pretty nice insight into future events. My only complaint is that despite Jade, Verde and Sakuya having some light shone into their emotional states, Hecate's bit was basically just setting up the plot's future events, meaning I didn't get to see some more of that cute little psycho witch. Oh well.

I have to say that despite Mario's high Intelligence, his Wisdom score seems to be pretty stunted if he thought that trying to rules lawyer a Pokegirl with sex would be effective in getting her to focus on the task at hand (I'm joking, I'm joking).

Anyways, I'll be gladly waiting for that second part. Keep it up, man.

*smirks at the portal window showing Sakura* Not everything can be explained. Like losing a friend but keeping another safe.

Lilith: You still aren't making sense, Tae.

Right. *closes the portal window* Lilith and I are realm hoppers. She just takes on the form of a creature that matches her personality in the realm. In this of her being a Draco but still a succubus powers. *flicks my fringe from my eyes before Taking out the pokedex that belonged to our friend that was killed* I'm an inventor and past time mercenary. Well. See you around.

*teleports away with Lilith*

The future looks long and difficult for Mario and company, especially poor Sakuya. Being placed in illegal underground death matches is already showing signs of changing the fox we all used to know,but its good to see she still has a fighting spirit and still determined to find a way to escape (if that's possible).

Hecate is showing slight signs of her obsession with Mario and its most likely gonna get worse in the next arc.

Verde finally opening up about damn time.

Well its sad that this is over but exciting knowing things kick into gear next arc and i'm sure with time frame of when it will be started, i'm sure you'll have a great sense in which direction you want it to go and what is gonna happen.

I look forward to the next installment to Mario adventure.

See ya next arc