Okay, so I totally cried a bit..

Good story!

Well that was...Fun?

You made me cry

Bleh.

So is this just a rehash of Avengers, expect Harry is there for no reason? He's done literally nothing.

Past tense story, means you don't flip flop between past and present tense.

Wow! This an incredibly moving chapter and actually made my shed a few tears! You have a lot of amazing potential as a writer! God has given you a gift and I pray that He would guide you though the correct path to use it! Good Luck in life
- Connor Jenke

Interesting. Just Harry doesnt really act or seem that powerful that everyone hints at.

Yes, I will completely admit this chapter made me cry.

Very good !

Wwhiel your prose is clear, your stories are devoid of tension or vivid characters. ALal you really have here is a short, too short rehash of old cliches and characters. If you want to make your stories better, i higly recommend developing your characters, giving them flaws and virtues, delving into them in their deeds and words, not telling but showing, and expanding your story by about 2x-3x. Nevertheless, it was enjoyable in a popcorn- flick fashion. Thank you.

I enjoyed what I read

I wish you made Harry older. And I hate Ginny. WTF are you doing bringing her in here? Harry is supposed to be an almighty master of death. Fuck Ginny and romance :(

cool