*sniff* ...the feels ;-;

Well this was certainly your most poetic piece yet, which is cool, because I like poetry (and by extension, poetic stories). Your writing was very graceful, and incredibly engaging. Technically, I think this is probably one of your best pieces yet. That being said, I think the style makes it much harder for somebody who doesn't know the series to understand and get to know the characters, certainly when compared to your other Persona piece. The way you almost seem to be writing from both characters perspectives, as though it's first and second person simultaneously, drew me in very well, but left me rather in the dark in regards to just who I was reading about. I'm probably in the definite minority as somebody who doesn't know anything about the Persona series (I mean, it is a Persona fanfic) so I wouldn't call that an issue necessarily, it's more just something I'm pointing out for future pieces you write.

Outside of that though, there really isn't much for me to take issue with. Your work (as always) is incredibly well done, and some of the most engaging writing I've had the pleasure of reading. The kind of stuff I might even buy if walking into a bookstore and purchasing yuri erotic fiction seemed about one hundred times less awkward xD.

Anyway, great work as always, and I can't wait to see more from you.