crazy update

I hope you update soon! I can't wait to read more!

I hope you update soon

UPDATE SOON!

Please continue this wonderful story. Ones where FemHarry can grow up as a normal happy child with siblings are so rare

You cant write to save your life.

Plz plz update

I really like this story; can you please continue with it?

Look at that. Hermione's on her way to being a Mary-Sue. Personality check, again, this time it's McGonagall.

Also, if Isidore was already taught that, why is she relearning it? She should just be home-schooled if she's going to be retaught about things.

You went with the cliche 'mate/creature inheritance thing' and it's one of the worst ones I've ever read. The one I have the most trouble is Isidore. You've made her too perfect, a Mary-Sue. Even though she didn't grow up with the Dursleys, and wouldn't be the "martyr, hero complex" person, she is just to perfect. With the fair skin, blonde hair (which would be very slim to get since one parent has black hair and the other has dark red, even if the color came from Isi's grandmother), she's taught politics, she's funny and nice, everyone loves her. She's too ooc, even for a fem!Harry oc who didn't grow up with the Dursleys.

This could be a good story if you fixed up the character's personalities (I honestly don't believe that the headmaster would allow the uniform to be changed, especially that drastically and by someone who hasn't lived in the country for the past decade), spent less time on what they're wearing and fixed the grammar errors.

You can ignore everything else, but please, just fix Isi's personality, if the characters are too perfect (especially the main character), nobody is going to want to read it.

The character personality change can also apply to your other stories.

what is wrong with Isi? please update soon!

I honestly doubt that I need to know the main character uses Maybelline Baby Lips and BB Cream.
So, seriously? Unless Maybelline is paying you to sponsor them (I highly doubt it) then stop. Please.

We get it. You like the brand Maybelline. But that literally adds nothing to imagery or anything to the story, besides convincing me that you try way to hard to follow fads (like Baby Lips). Instead, maybe you should focus on the other more important parts of writing-like punctuation-which your story is lacking in.

Firstly, single quotations (ex. 'adsfj') are never ever used to indicate speech. Seriously. If you don't know how to use them, don't touch them. Dialogue is represented by double quotations (ex. "dfkjf") ONLY, with the punctuation inside the quotations.

Also, ice cream does not have a hyphen connecting the words.

Where the fuck are the Potters, anyways? Apparently, they moved away from England-since Isidore doesn't attend Hogwarts and I feel like they're in France in one moment (but France doesn't sell Japanese Ramen) so. I have no fucking clue. Introduce your characters and setting properly, woman.

Anywho.

(For now, I'll just go with the assumption that they're in Narnia. Especially since Hermione manages to bring a laptop to Hogwarts without any explanation whatsoever as well).

Oh, another thing? Your so-called "flamer" was completely right about your main character. Isidore is LITERALLY the embodiment of a Mary Sue. She's THE "perfect" character. She's smart, she's talented at music, she's beautiful, she's taught politics, she's funny, she's nice, everyone loves her-and her life is essentially perfect. Which makes her a fucking Mary Sue.

You gave hate to someone who was not only correct, but also made a valid point that you should have seriously considered. Maybe an apology should be due? Yeah, I think so too.

And since I'm being honest here? Saying that since this is your first story; you have the right to make mistakes is the WORST excuse ever.

It's also incredibly irresponsible.

If your story sucks, don't post it. No one is going to give your story more lenient treatment because it's your first story. In fact, if you mess this story up, we're just more likely to judge you more harshly since you just failed to give us a good first impression.

This leads me to my last point. We're your readers. Yes, you ARE sharing your writing. But we do you the privilege of reading it. We're allowed to (constructively) criticize you (to a certain extent), because we're the ones that read it and then choose to follow or review.

I DESPISE authors who get offended when someone posts a critique in their review. You do realize that you are posting this on the fucking internet for everyone to see, right? And guess what? The internet is harsh and we like to judge. So really, if you're unprepared for that?

Don't post your writing. Simple. Otherwise, take responsibility and learn to accept other opinions (chances are they're probably right).

Plz update

Update soon!

I really love how you displayed Hermione as a character after she met Isi and how she starts to show her mischievous side. Please update soon.
:)