Well I just finished reading your story and I had been pleasantly surprised by the originality you brought to the story. You had me hooked and that isn't that easy because if I don't like the story during the first two chapters I don't stick around to find out the ending.

Many authors out there are unable to describe the initiation process in a different way than Veronica Roth did. You managed to do that and to do it well. Plus add original twist to the story with new characters whose characteristics aren't merely copying Tris and Four's story.

I really appreciate you using normal names for the characters. I like originality but it has to have a purpose.

What I wasn't really sure about was the storyline connection to the original books. I'm not sure what really happened, only Divergent? But how come Tori and Tobias became leaders and Eric and Max are gone? On is there a part of Insurgent too? But which one? What about Jeanine? I miss that explanation, perhaps you could write an accompanying piece that will come in between Divergent and I am Dauntless? :)

I would also like to see how would you deal with whole Allegiant experiment theory. I personally think Veronica Roth had a lots of holes in the original story (like Emmental-cheese-holes!) and haven't seen many of fanfictions that address the issue.

So keep up the good writing and don't beg for the reviews too much ;) I personally prefer to read the story once it's finished since authors update once a month at best to once a year and I just tend to forget what the story was about during that time. But I do try and review every story that I finish and that deserves it.

Good luck with your other stories, I look forward to reading them.

Sadie's mum seems too selfish to be Amity.
Well...just selfish period.
go Sadie

CONTINUE!

I. Need. To. Know. What. Happens.

Gage better not die, by the way...

This story is awesome.

that was a perfect ending i loved it! maby do like a three years later sequal after the revelution and stuff and sadie and gage could be together and they could be like leaders or somthing.

Most likely must turn into definitely. It has to. No exceptions. This is one of my favourite stories and if there isn't a sequel I think I might cry. YOU CAN'T END THE STORY ON A CLIFFHANGER IT ISN'T RIGHT, IT ISN'T JUST! I NEED TO KNOW MORE!

WHAT? THE END? You better write a sequel. When i look at the authors note on the next page it better say 'I will be writing a sequel'.

Really? Fine, if you excuse me, I'll go pretend I have a life while you all review..

Do it for the children.

Hey! Just started reading! It is very awesome!

My prediction is Gage was kidnapped/captured by his parents and the Erudite.

Great job so far! Can't wait for the next part!

Oh cliff hanger and there's far to many things that could happen but I think it's bad

Love it!

Of gage is tricking her then he is one hell of an actor

Now I'm starting to feel like I've read this before...I really need to start writing down which chapter I ended on...

So, I love this chapter, there's just one thing I'm confused about. Is Austin already in dauntless, or is he factionless now?