Not a fan of this exposition of what she is and where she comes from. I kinda wish you explained which version of spartan your character is, because she is way to social to be a Spartan II. Not to mention on how Oni and UNSC protocols forbid this kind of talk.

I would get this like idk maybe 1 year of trusting someone to consider the possibility of Sofia not coming back to UNSC space.

So far the story isn’t bad just a few nitpicks, but I’m enjoying this so far. Skimming this chapter tho, it like in most of halo crossovers.

Don’t worry about a slow upload speed. I know far to well how easy it is to lose track of time. Anyways, the last couple chapters (I fell behind :/) we awesome, but I’m glad we’re finally getting to the good parts. See you at the next update...
... Archangel Writings

Is this abandoned, or do you plan on updating it?

Just a quick point out that she couldn't have been a staff sergeant. In lore, spartans are either part of the navy (in which case she would have been a petty officer first class, assuming you would want her to retain the E6 pay grade) or, more likely for an S-IV, the Spartan branch, where there are no ranks (though in this case you could go for the interpretation of "spartan is [her] rank" if you'd like).

Well thia would be a great story, but your OC is too much a damn Mary Sue. The One Ring can't corrupt her, Dark Magic doesn't affect her, i mean shit i hate pitch perfect protagonists and unless you make her less OP then she sucks. I swear that if your OC one punch man's the Balrog in the upcoming chapters im officially done with this story.

Thank you for the update, it is good to have you back.

Cheers

Octo-monster attack soon? Lol, when I first saw that scene, I jumped. Keep up your good work.

aa porfin de nuevo al rumbo espero tu siguiente actualizaciones

Eowen* Shield Maiden of Rohan

Is risen going to fall for the strong, independent beautiful Sophia? Because in my mind she is

Two chapters in two days! You inspire a fellow author, so many thanks! And I can't wait to see what happens next.

Always happy to see a story update

GET THE PITCHFORKS! -E

JK Jk. Finally! More amusing stuff to read!

This might seem like a minor nitpick, but Olympus Mons and the Southern Alps (the mountains that run the length of New Zealand where the mountain scenes in the movies were filmed) aren't really comparable. While Olympus Mons is about 2.5 times taller than Everest, it's a shield volcano about as wide as France. Consequently, it has a shallow slope of only about 5. If you were standing at the top, it wouldn't look as though you were standing at the top of a tall mountain, because the base is far beyond the horizon (and it would also be the same anywhere else on the mountain).

Glad this isn't over yet. Be a shame to see this one snuffed out too soon. Keep up the good work.