The writing quality is good in terms of your spelling and grammar, but the following part of the Content Guidelines is broken for being a second person or you-based story:

Entries not allowed:
5. Any form of interactive entry: choose your adventure, second person/you based, Q&As, and etc.

Please remove all of the elements related to the reader and replace them with a canon character or original character. Switch to first person or third person point of view. You can always put it on another site where it is allowed like Archive Of Our Own.

oh no...

I hope u didnt stop with this one
I really love it

Wow that was interesting! I liked it a lot! And the battle was intense!

Oooh boy, and a 'spar' with Sephiroth? I'm lucky my head is still intact. o-o

Lol, I like this idea. I think I would have squeaked very loud if I was caught with Zack and black out. xD

This is awesome! I love the foam idea! Please write more!