Gwentor Wow your very triggered, guessing you go to every DxD story just the comment that.

Disgusting this story just like original. Koneko is a character created for pedophiles and only pedophiles like her. This story supports pedophilia.

I really like the premise of the story and what you did with it, and I can tell how much work you put in with how long it is. I would just suggest trying to proofread more or maybe ask someone you know to check it over for you. The grammar and back and forth of 1st and 3rd person make it hard to understand sometimes. Other than that, keep up the good work!

Looking forward to how things develop

an enjoyable opening chapter

You had Kokabiel lose an arm and then have him holding light spears in his arm(s). Did he grow the one back or something?

I'm not really sure I like this story yet... I'll come back to it later to give it another chance probably, but it just doesn't seem like something I want to read so far.

He/she please don't get discouraged by these silly comments. I very much enjoyed your story and try to improve the sentence and overall the story is good.
Good luck for next stroy

Love the story

wat the fk, I saw this fic a long time ago and this year was like mhh this look interesting let me see wy I stopped reading it then boom, I remember. too much bullshit

wat the fk, I saw this fic a long time ago and this year was like mhh this look interesting let me see wy I stopped reading it then boom, I remember. too much bullshit

Constant switching from first to third person perspective made this almost unreadable. Despite still being interested in the story, I can't read any farther.

and both anime at eachother? i couldnt even translate that sentence in my head so i have no clue what it was supposed to mean :/

you keep using the wrong words, they arent demons, they are devils. there is supposed to be a difference.

your spelling and grammer is getting worse as the story progresses i think. but i find the story interesting even if i have to translate it in my mind.