Sherlock and Joan have definitely gone to the next step with a vengeance.

Very beautiful chapter. As the vow says : 'in sickness and in health'.

This was such a sweet and romantic chapter! I'm currently reading chapter three, but didn't want to go all the way to the bottom of it to give a review. Anyway, the story is marvelous so far and I really like the array of different words! I can't writ romantic stuff like this, for shit, so I envy you for being able to do so. Keep up the good work! You'll be a great writer someday

Nice :)

That chapter just makes me want to go awwwww! You never know how much your man cares until he takes care of you when you need it

Hi there. I got this far when I found that it wasn't so much my cup of tea. It's well written for sure, but I think that it's Sherlock being quite out of character (in my opinion at least) that put me off. I just can't see him being over emotional or spouting such flowery language. And I really can't picture anyone talking about "jade gates" in the middle of such a heated, intimate moment, least of all Watson.

Anyhoo, thank you for sharing this with us, and I wish you well in your future writing endeavors.

I can tell that you enjoy writing and that you enjoyed writing this. That is Great! One suggestion, however, is to trust that you have written well enough that your readers will understand a scene or quote.
In the quote about the "Jade Gate" you quote Watson and then qualify the quote by saying in exposition, she was "using the beautiful euphemism from her Chinese culture." That qualifier was unnecessary explanation and ultimately took away from what was trying to be expressed.
I'm only saying this because it is something that a lot of people do, and it gets in the way of the story. My suggestion is to cut out all of the things that don't need to be said or explained to make the story have better flow.

Nice tohave the steeles in this story.

I loved the show 'Remington Steele' so glad you put it in the story!

This is in response to the "guest" review - in the wise words of Joan Watson - "just because you don't understand something doesn't mean it isn't awesome." The story is not your cup of tea, understood. And you have every right to express your opinion, but the words chosen by you came across, at least to me, as hurtful and mean-spirited. I'm sure that wasn't your intent. I was once told that you can judge a work of art as succesful by the passion of the reaction it causes in the viewer/reader, whether the reaction be good or bad.
Sorry had to get that off my chest.

i don't like the way you're writing the intimacy part...after the first chapter i stopped reading because i thought it was disgusting instead of being romantic, then I came back to read more because I thought I should give it a chance, but then I changed my mind after chapter reading chapter 4 which was beyond disgusting.
i understand the concept is "intimacy and getting to know each other" but that doesn't mean you have to be so explicit and so disgusting about it.

I'm sorry but chapter 4 is disgusting. I stopped reading and won't be back.

good chapter and is there more to your story.
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Hurry back with more.

great intimate story and incredibly romantic story based on the tv show elementary.

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