First off you may want to read this chapter again cause there were a lot of typos, too many to name all of them here. And there was also two inconsistent lines between chapters again. The first was when you were talking about Eris' mom's journal. Eris said,
"Several. One from each year at Hogwarts plus one from after. Oh and the year before she came to Hogwarts. That one's pretty useless though." But you wrote,
"Several. One from each year at Hogwarts, plus one from after. Oh, and the year before." And the other one was,
"We're probably all related then. Purebloods seem to love their incest." The incest part wasn't in yours. I know that these were close to being the same, they were still different in each chapter and needs to be fixed somehow. I have to say that I enjoyed Eris' chapter much more this time. Your's was still good but you have a lot of errors you need to fix.

I'm in love with the relationship between Eris and Remus. It's so sweet and sad at the same time and I just can't get enough of it. :) Also the dialogue between Eris and Phineas is getting much better all the time. The part at the beginning with Eris and Remus catching fireflies was also really sweet and heartwarming and I loved all of it. Keep up the fantastic work. :)

Good chapter, though Eris' had more going on at the end that made it a lot more interesting Avril's was still good. I found 2 typos though that you might want to fix. You said sis this symbolize when you meant did, and you forgot the f for fire place. And the only complaint I have is that you said you could see the relief on Remus, from the way Eris told it, it seemed like he wasn't showing much emotion except for nervousness though she could see the relief in his eyes and slightly in his voice. Just saying it seems like she shouldn't have known that. Still very good though. :)

Okay this is my favorite chapter now, the sadness at the end of the chapter made it much more engaging. I know it sounds weird me liking the sad part but it was so well made I can't help but love it. I really really hope the rest is as good as this. :)

Hello again, I know I gave a lot of criticism last time and I still have a little this time but over all it was still really good. :) The main thing I saw was that the line that Ollivander said " Try it. It might be the right one." that wasn't in Eris' chapter, I know it's a small thing but with things like this you have to have consistency. Also when Ollivander told them to give back their wands it wasn't very clear who yelled we only just got them, I went back to Eris' chapter to make sure who was saying it. And the vision, it was explained a little better this time but I still don't understand at all. Again I know you may want to keep things hidden for the plot but when you mention visions and don't explain how they work or why she has them, or for the first one what it even was, it leaves a sour taste and can make the reader really confused as to what's happening. That's it though this one was a lot better than the other two chapters so I hope they keep getting better. :)

I liked this chapter much more than the other 2, oh and hi it's me again the guy who wrote the last 2 reviews. :) I really liked this one and I didn't have a lot of problems with it to be honest. There were two errors though, one you said "Due to Remus being a werewolf" twice right after each other, that's not a big problem just a small fix, and... I'm sorry there was another typo but I can't find it again. But anyways other than that I really liked it keep up the good work. :)

I've really liked this so far. I just wrote a review for Avril's so I'm writing one for Eris' too.I really like both of the view points, but I do have one tiny complaint with Eris' at least the first chapter, it feels really rushed. Like it started and a lot of things happened really quick, it's not a big complaint just a tiny one. But what I really like is the banter between her and Phineas, it's really well written and really funny. The way you write seems really good and like Avril's your grammar and punctuation are good as well. Over all I really like the stories. Keep up the good work. :)

Over all I think it's okay. Your writing seems good and you're using correct grammar and punctuation, but there are some things that I don't like. For one Avril doesn't act like an eleven year old, she's acting with experience of someone much older than herself. Also the one line "Avril got the impression that, though this hadn't been the only prank she'd pulled, it was one of the few she'd been caught on." From the way you've been writing it's obviously not 3rd person omniscient, so there's really no way for her to have known that. Also the thing about the family not knowing about the book store, how could they not have known? It's in Diagon Alley where hundreds and thousands of people are, at least one person would have told them. Oh and the thing with the vision; if you're gonna mention that at least explain a little bit, I understand if you don't want to ruin some surprises later in store but it's not a good idea to mention something like that and then just gloss over it. And I don't really understand the gaping when Eris said you can't help me but that's a tiny thing. I know I've said a lot of things I didn't like but over all it was good, there were just some things that I didn't really like.

I absolutely loved the chapter! I can't wait for more! Brilliant job guys!
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C. B. Weasley

I loved the chapter ladies! Amazing job! I can't wait for more!
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C. B. Weasley

Can I just say that that cookie was super delicious! You guys are so sweet! Thanks so much! I absolutely loved the chapter! Amazing writing! Thank you for writing this fanfiction!
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C. B. Weasley

this is really awesome!

I absolutely loved it! Thanks so much for the mention! That was really sweet! I can't wait for more!
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C. B. Weasley

That was an awesome chapter! I absolutely loved it! I can't wait for more!
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C. B. Weasley

That was an awesome chapter! I loved it!
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C. B. Weasley