| Reviews for Circuit network |
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   SteadfastWhiplash chapter 1 . 6/18 I hope you know I was just trying to give some constructive criticism. Don't wanna step on anyone's toes. |
| SteadfastWhiplash chapter 1 . 6/18 Careful with using a word too often in a short amount of time, it comes off as strange. You bold things way too much, and don't do caps lock sentences but rather just use an exclamation point. Also for small numbers under a million, write them out. If you fix those issues than this would be a very entertaining story. |
| Hikari Nova chapter 5 . 3/15 revive and update this please it's really interesting and just starting to get good as well |
| annyms chapter 5 . 1/23 Update please |
| Rodenmar chapter 3 . 1/24 Okay, I get that you want to differentiate your version of Shirou with the Shirou from that other story that you drew your inspiration from. But I've been reading up to chapter three and nothing important is happening YET. We're still in the first act, when is the war starting? I don't mind the whole extra magecraft stuffs but the long info-dump wall of texts is a slog to read through. |
| someUntel chapter 2 . 7/5/2019 It’s not zink. It’s zinc. If you don’t have a beta already, I strongly suggest you read it over paragraph by paragraph to spot grammar errors such as missing apostrophes, spelling, and capitalization. |
| Guest chapter 5 . 3/24/2019 Honestly after reading what’s here I have to say that I like it more than the original |
| sugoijack9 chapter 5 . 3/7/2019 RETURN HERE BOI! |
| sugoijack9 chapter 4 . 3/7/2019 MORE AND KILL SHINJI EARLY |
| sugoijack9 chapter 3 . 3/6/2019 Bad guys cropping up plans. |
| sugoijack9 chapter 2 . 3/6/2019 DUN DUN DUN! I like the advanced instead the canon where unprepared and many variation to come by. Least now he's prepared for the things to come when the Fifth War started. |
| Guest chapter 5 . 1/6/2019 please update |
| ALTER-BOT chapter 1 . 10/8/2018 'to be born good or overcome your weaknes through great effort?' |
| strabimonx chapter 2 . 6/18/2018 Nice |
| miguelgiuliano.co chapter 5 . 4/13/2018 Genial historia espero que en algún momento futuro puedas continuar con ella . Seguro ya sabrás esto pero Arturia tiene una versión adulta de ella siendo Arturia/lancer rey de leones , de otra linea de tiempo como tú también lo planteas en tu historia . Sabes creo que las Arturia's de tu historia deberían estar en su forma adulta pero con los fantasmas nobles que mencionasteis ; así tal vez sea Emita/archer quien termine emparejado con las Arturia's . ( recomendación Emita/archer se ve genial con el cabello largo ; fate/extella-link ; y puede usar varios fantasmas nobles como Excalibur , Gae-bolg , la espada de Nero , la espada de Gawain y otros fantasmas nobles de alto rango ). Espero que tu historia apunte a una apocrypha de varios equipos ; donde los master's originales de la quinta guerra del santo grial contra los magos nobles enviados por la Asociación de Magos y los Servant's del falso ruler Akazuma-Shirō-Tokisada . * Equipo Azul ( la asociación de magos ): - Lluvia ; Nero/Caster(fate/go) - Waver ; Iskandar/rider - Reines ; Leonidas/Lancer - kiari ; Mordred/saber - Lorelei ; Arjuna/Archer - Darnic ; Vlad-III/Berserker(fate/go) - Julius ; Serenety/Assessin * Equipo Negro ( Akazuma Shirō Tokisada ): - Rider/Achilles - Saber/Gawain - Dual-class(assessin-caster)/Semiramis - Berserker/Dario-III - Lancer/Karna - Caster/Nitocris - Archer/Athalanta * Equipo Rojo ( Originales ) - Rin ; Emita/Archer - Bazzet ; Cu-chuliann/Dual-Class(lancer-caster) - Sakura ; Medusa/Assessin - Shirou ; Arturia/Saber - Shirou ; Arturia/Rider - Illyaviel ; Heracles/Berserker - Kusuki ; Medea/Caster Bueno esta es solo mi opinión personal espero que no te haya molestado . |
