When will you update?

Gah. I need more. I thought it would be a simple story. But it's more complicated... And right now, I don't see much of Rukia... More of Kioshi and Kaien... Will that change in the future? I'm looking forward to reading more. I like this story a lot.

Uwaa please update soon!

What the?! Ichigo believes that Senna (freaking b!tch) is Ichiro's mother?! What kind of bullshit is that? I guess he saw the resemblance between Rukia and Ichiro. Boy, is he stupid or what? I really hate Ichigo for doing this to Rukia. I want him to suffer! A lot! So please, whenever you find the time, please please please update. I'm looking forward to your next update!

Lots of love from a fellow ichiruki fan :)

Oh Crap! My eyes bulged out on the last part of the chapter when Inoue was revealed as the third wife, Bullocks! I'm not a fan, I almost Bankai the author for that. Heh!

So, it seems like Kioshi was abducted and fed lies about his true identity. There is also a hint that Ichigo thinks that Ichiro/Kioshi is his love child from Senna, who I think was beheaded (Yay!) for some reason. Oh that's another story worth telling huh? That would be another flashback chapter. Wow we're going somewhere here, like it's getting deeper. I just can't seem to find in me to like Ichigo here, I wish you could type in some chapter telling his side of the story and not just the children's to clear some things out. I mean, hey, I like Ichigo in general. Bleach is not Bleach without him but come on, he's an arse here! We're on the eight chapter and nothing has been revealed yet of what happened that day when Ichigo and Senna has been thrown away in the dungeon together, or otherwise, so I think it's about time to find out a little bit of that too.

I think you're making progress with the plot and with careful proofing, some adjustments on dialogues and we're going to have a blast! Keep it coming.

Awesome fict..I really want to read how ichigo and rukia finally meet again..so that she can..KILL HIM! Just kidding.. But I'm really interested to read what happen next!

Eh? You know I like flashbacks but I got dizzy with this one over who's who. But once I got over the mixed up of names I was okay.

There are two scenarios here I'd like to guess for my own entertainment. One is that Kioshi was abducted, and two is that Kioshi went with the Kurosakis willingly without the Kuchikis knowledge, like run away when the Kurosakis leave the Kuchiki holdings. But either way the end result was the same, Kioshi ended up with the Kurosaki's for a long time, the how is a big question right now but I'm hoping to get an answer on the next update. I don't think the Kuchikis send the youngest twin to the Kurosakis willingly, especially when they didn't even want the Kurosakis to meet the children.

This is getting better as the story grows, a lot of whys are popping with big question marks in the end. And i'm looking forward for what Ichigo have to say for himself, what's his story?

Thank you for the update ergo-san, it has been awhile but I'm glad you still find time to write. Looking forward for the next update, I hope there would be answers on the next chapter.

Gah! I need to know what happens next! Please update reaalllllyyyyyyyyyyyy soon!

Please update reaalllllyyyyyyyyyyyy soon!

Oh My Gigai! (Uchiha Xairylle) I'm speechless (well, not really considering my comments tend to be a novella) I feel important, whoa! Thank you so much for considering other characters as the object of Kaien and Ichiro's affection, you're spoiling me. (Catches your confetti, hmm, it consisted of half moon, sun, and snowflakes! Awesome!)

Well now we know Ichiro ended with his father's side of the family but we still don't know how it happened exactly. I'd like to think Rukia didn't just give him to the Kurosaki's willingly and that the Kuchiki's didn't do anything to take him back, after all Ichiro is still a Kuchiki and I can't for the love of Bleach think how a betrayed wife and mother let her children be separated. I know there's a story behind that and I can't wait to find out. You see, whenever I read stories like this, with lots of conflicts, hindrances, and or hang- ups, questions begin to form in my head that tend to linger and make me think ahead of the writer. I usually make it as a game to myself and guess what would happen next, if I got it correctly then I get points and convert them to monetary unit and buy myself another book to download. But this is not about me, this is how my head now is spinning of questions for this chapter.

Princess Miyako (by the way, very nice thinking of using her here perfect) as I understand is attracted to Kaien and not to Ichiro, (of course, Miyako is Kaien's all along) what I want to know is how siblings ended up fighting for her hand and why the Kurosaki's allowed it to happen if they know who Kaien is in the first place. I'm guessing it has something to do with the change of his name from Kioshi to Ichiro, I'm thinking there's more to it and I'm really not sure how to second guess your next move. As I've said, my mind is running like a shunpo and my brain is throbbing counter clockwise from a lot of questions forming in my head. I want to hear or read Ichiro's thoughts about the fight, I want to know Ichigo's side of the story, I want to know the motives behind Kioshi's abduction if he was abducted or kidnapped or whatever. I want to know if they look a like, or if Kioshi has Ichigo's hair or if they're fraternal or not. What happened in that seventeen years?

Oh My Kichigai! (Uchiha Xairylle) Ergo-san, I think we're talking about a multi chap story here. You need to tell us the story behind the story, excitement is making me giddy and I can't wait for the next update knowing Kaien brought Kioshi home with him! I'm sure it would be an emotional reunion for Rukia and Kioshi, and I'm expecting lots of flashbacks. Flashback is necessary for us to understand the whole concept of the story, especially when something happened and you need to explain how it happened and why but couldn't since the chapter has already been posted and it would be complicated if you pull it out in the middle of the story, so flashbacks are good, I like flashbacks.

One only thing I'm disturb with the chapter though is Kaien constantly calling Rukia mommy. I think of him as a five year old trying to be seventeen whenever he uses the word (in feudal time in Japan, boys are considered men when they reach the age of fifteen because life expectancy is short and they need men to fight for their cause). As we all know, this is feudal time in Japan and the word mommy is not being use at this time, may I suggest using the general word Mother to make it a little formal, or Otosan/Okasan? Also, may I suggest flashbacks to be written in cursive as to make it easier to distinguish?

Thank you again for the update, I really enjoy the chapter. I hope it wont take too long for you to satisfy our curiosity and post another update soon. I like it and we'll be here again for you when you come back.

i love rukia but i don't like bashing ichigo...
i like this fic

interesting
i like it

Wow! Ergoproxy-san, you indulged me! Thank you so much!

Now let's talk about this chapter. Yeah short but I have a feeling that you're preparing for a better, longer, and more informative chapter to post so it doesn't matter. So both of them are now seventeen and getting ready to kill each other over a princess hand in marriage, (really? It's Momo? I was expecting it to be somebody like Ishida's daughter or an original character) and both of them are unaware of each other being twins. They must have not seen each other yet, or they're fraternal twins. I wonder if Kaien is the oldest. I'm sure I'll figure it out in the upcoming chapters and that you'll let us know how Ichiro ended up with the Kurosaki's to grow up without the knowledge of his mother and sibling. The last time time we left Ichigo and Senna was when they were thrown in the Kurosaki dungeon seventeen years ago. Ichigo doesn't deserve his family, at least not yet in my opinion (just like in 'Feather' -TheQuietScream), but l would still want to know what happened to them and how he got his hands to Ichiro.

Thank you for the update ErgoProxy-san, and for considering a twin offsprings, although I can't figure out how you'd write it, I'm sure it would be interesting. I still find myself intrigued with this piece, and look forward for the next update, please continue.

Really interesting story :)
Hope that you update soon because i really want to know how has ichigo spend all those years with rukia?

XD Now that was a hilarious chapter. "there goes my manly aura..." Oh my gosh...although, Ichigo and Kaien liking the same princess? A old man (i mean, Ichigo is Kaien's dad) liking a princess... O.O Well, whatever. XD I totally agree, Ichigo is a little b*tch...:) Go Rukia! Do not end up with Ichigo...