This was so good I loved it.

Congratulations on writing a fantastic/brilliant story! ... and on making me cry a lot :D

I really liked this story up until the Rose running away part. I really hate it when women do that in stories and I feel like it's really out of character for Rose.

Amazing...

Such a great story! Enjoyed it from beginning to end!

GREAT story. Lovely writing, fantastic job.

Beautiful. I love the ending,and I think it's your best one, the way "run" is the last word in the story where it was his first in the episode. All of your endings and cliffhangers were great to begin with too. Loved it. Loved the story, and this chapter reaches the point where you make no more than theone or two minor mix ups that are perfectly normal in any story written on this site. Thank you for the story and for putting up with my advice. This is me, signing off. Well done!

Those first two paragraphs were...amazing. Heartfelt and amazing. I love how you're not afraid to use punctuation to get the emotions across. Well done. Just a missed period and one run on sentence, but the mistakes are definitely less as the chapters go on so far.

I love it when I get to see a writer improve and as chapters progress. It means they really are trying and care about the maturity of the story and their own skills. Awesome.

It's due to a limp, not do.

Otherwise fine; there's only one question mark needed: "Are you alright, miss[?]"

In fact, it caught me quite by surprise. I know she's gonna be alright but...agh! Heart dropping all the same. Wonderfully written.

Lots of question marks needed and a fair amount of run on sentences in the beginning.

"...he would say one thing[:] don't blink."

Oh, and if someone is speaking and there isn't a need for an exclamation or question mark, a comma goes there, even if it's the end of a sentence. Example: Jon replied, " No." The period is fine there, but " No," John replied. Needs a comma before the last quotation mark. Just a pointer.

In " nanny job of your's" there is no apostrophe. It's just "yours".

"mum" and "blondie" are capitalized.

" Mum[?] Dad? What are you doing here?"

"Yep! Isn't it lovely[?]"

"You're not to old for a smack you know" gets a PERIOD not a question mark unless you add a "you know that?" or a "you know that, right?" At the end.
Your last "What" needs the two switched again.

I think from this point, you can get the idea. Again, if I'm coming off as arrogant or mean, I'm sorry, I'm just trying to help. If i see anything strikingly off at this point I'll mention it, but otherwise I leave you alone. Story is still great! I'm glad Donna and Jack are together! Now for Rose and John!

"What did you do about school[?]"
"He did what [?!]"
"Two years [?!]"

Otherwise good. Loved the sticking up for Lynda bit; it's not the type of situation one reads in a story, and it gives a chance to show Rose's bravery and compassion. Great job!

"She turned her head and read the time [-] 8:15 am"

"How long had he been asleep" the question marks goes before the exclamation because it's a question first. It's a basic rule, so that applies to "Me!?" As well; the two get switched around. There's a couple of unneeded commas, but if you don't find them, they fit I enough to where it doesn't throw the sentence off too much. Otherwise you're pretty good. Just that Daddy, again, needs to be capitalized. But yay! Rose is the nanny now! And thank you for adding Sarah Jane. I like her. Reading on!

" did you know that she started taking overtime at one of her jobs" get a a question mark at the end, not a period. Same for " what if she passed out this time and seriously injured herself". "Daddy" is capitalized unles you are having them say "my daddy", in the possessive sense". That might've been a typo and you already knew that, but just in case. There are some places where semicolons would be more appropriate, but look up the proper way to use them before throwing them in there. For example: " Rolling his eyes [COMMA, not a period] John shut his phone off[;] he had no desire to continue this conversation with his sister." Sounds better because they're both tied to the same thought. But again, don't get carried away! Look it up first.

Oh, and I forgot to mention how much I love how Jenny mixes up her words. It's adorable and, most importantly, not overdone. Wonderful job!

Okay, really really great story so far. Seriously. The plot is strong, realistic, and in character. The only thing is that, while your sentence structure is a ton more mature than many of the other stories out there, you have run on sentences sprinkled throughout your chapters at this point, and also some places where you put a period where there should be a question mark. For example, in this chapter, Martha ASKS John if he could step outside for a moment. She is asking, so it needs a question mark. If she says it more like a demand, you can mention it like: "...Martha clipped, her tone indicating it was a command more than a request." But sometimes the reader can indicate the tone all by themselves. And if you have a "why don't you" at the beginning, that ends in a question mark too: " why don't you go play with your Uncle Jack for awhile?" I know it's been awhile since you completed this, but it's worth it to go back and look for things like this for the sake of the story and your readers; fixing the mistakes will bring a B story to an A. Trust me. I'm telling you this not because I like to criticize, but because I see a story that's so CLOSE to being perfect, and I know the little tweaks to make to get it there; I want this story to look good for your sake, and right now, you're on the borderline edge between an educated writer, who merely made a couple mistakes, and a novice writer that didn't learn the rules before playing. I know, it sounds harsh, but when basic rules like that aren't followed, the reader starts to question whether the author really knows what they're doing. So fixing those up will boost your credit considerably. So, sorry for making this so long. I know this seems to lean on the negative side, but it's not. I'm just trying to stress how important it is. This story is lovely and that's why I want to help. I can't wait to see if Jack and Donna will get together because, honestly, I think it should have happened in the series. Alright, shutting up now to read more chapters now. Thanks for the story and your time.