It's absolutely beautiful!

no offense you did the same mistake as queenpearl wuo created my top favorite stories the olympian sisters book 1 and two and near the end you fix it up

Just an fyi I just did a hand panting of a galaxy it's on face book and Instagram .amaz

I have loved this story, you had a great premise and honestly wonderful Oc's and really great Ideas. However after your Ocs joined forces with the autobots, the story felt very rushed and in a way very onesided. It is quite clear that family is a very important theme and how it is effected and everyone's emotions of what their family goes through is always highlighted, and focused on. It helps connect us and sympathize with not only your Ocs but with the decepticons like Soundwave and knockout. At the Autobots base however, their family is barely mentioned. Arachnid nearly killed Jack on multiple occaissions and even made an attempt on June. I know that you mention it but she also killed arcee's first partner Tailgate, and yet Orb Weaver is allowed to have an "Oh Woe is Me" moment without entering that discussion? She mentions that her mother wasn't the best to her but Orb Weaver seems practically unaware of the damage Arachnid has done to others, and Arcee is made to look the bad guy in this dispute? I think songbird as a mother would at least have something to say about it. Furthermore knockout has his own "woe is me" moment to Ratchet about how he has never lost everything. One of the main themes of the prime series is the tragedy of war and it shows as the autobots base, their home iis destroyed in the end of season two forcing all members, all of their family members are forced to split up in different locations and left to worry. The pain of the loss, the memories they made there, the pain of not knowing if someone made it out alive or not, the inability to get in contact with one another due to the risk of being found. Ratchet is well aware of all of this, also he takes the loss of each autobot hard look at Stronger,Faster to see his anger towards the death of Cliffjumper. In fact he took the loss of their base harder than anyone in season three , he practically gave up. To say that he doesn't understand loss coming from knockout who was present at the raid of their base would be odd at minimum. I really would have preferred that the story spent an equal amount of time with songbird and the autobots as it did with songbird and the decepticons because it feels like it was only made this way so that we wouldn't be so upset at the outcome of Yue's trial.

Another thing, Concerning the Predacin genocide, there appears to be a factor that wasn't taken into consideration during the trial. While the autobots did commit a genocide in destroying them (granted they had not been given any hints towards their sentient nature prior to the incident) lets say that they didn't blow up the lab, what would the decipticons do with an army of predacons? It is most likely that they would first turn'em lose on the autobots on the earth, then the human race and then all remaining autobots across the galaxy. In a way this put the genocide of the predacon race as being a greater crime than committing a genocide against the entire human race as well as against half of the non-predacon cybertronian race. This decision if you think about it lies in a morally gray area. Do the autobots hold out for the hope that many will reconsider the faction they are born into and will likely be trained to fight for and put the lives of their cybertronian family and human family at risk or do they commit one genocide to keep the other from commiting two?

While others had many problems with Yue, I didn't mind her too much up until the last few chapters. I will say this, it is probably very difficult to create a half-goddess character who does not come off as a overpowered Mary Sue. And throughout the majority of the story, Yue was written pretty well. She is told in stories and gives supernatural guidance when needed most to those who are in need of it. Her powers were not overused at those areas and were fairly well regulated and respectable. While I do admit I would have preferred that the hydra encounter would be the one that drew the predacons and autobots together (having to systematically slice a head off and burn it to cauterize it and prevent a new one from growing) having Yue fight it instead was a good choice as well. But where her powers and actions shift her overboard, where she breaks the limits and becomes far too convient to the story is her trial. Again the autobots are not written in such a way for the reader to feel concerned with them. It forces them to just accept the punishment that Yue gives optimus (even though the one to make the call to destroy the predacons was UltraMagnus, he never contacted Optimus about this decision Optimus only found out about it after the fact). It is so awkward and rushed it felt like it was just done so that you could do whatever you wanted to do and bring justice to the Predaconsbut now... The regular cybertronian are left with no real form of leadership. Megatron's mute so Tarn as well as the rest of the DJD are gonna be mad. Optimus no longer has the wisdom of the primes so he barely remembers the rest of the war. Next in line would be Ultra Magnus who in this story is written in such a negative light that the reader is made to hate him as much as anyone hates Sentinel Prime in Transformers Animated. It makes the trial more confusing than anything else, I know it meant that both sides lose but there are still those who are like arachnid, third party quintessons, pirates, bounty hunters and outlaws who would only dream of both sides being in such a state of weakness that would take advantage of their state. Further more who are those returning to cybertron supposed to look to? In this way Yue went from being as wonderful and mystical as anyone of the spirits in Avatar the last Airbender to an odd mixture of Oberon from Gargoyles and Veruka Salt from Willy Wonka and the Chocolate Factory. It really makes the ending difficult to swallow and feels completely forced.

Please don't misunderstand me, I really liked this story. I read it when you first started it and would check the site regularly for the next update. I would always be excitedto see a new chapter had been story has some great characters. Do some of them border the Mary Sue line? Occaissionaly but they would seem to be reined in later. The beginning and middle are fantastic! The ideas are wonderful. It just felt that more time should have been taken in the end. My suggestion would be to try to take more time in each character's perspective, even minor ones. Treat each one as of equal importance and be sure to write the good in them as equally as you do the bad to create a good balance that will prevent an unbiased reader perspective. There is a site that If you type Mary Sue litmus test, you can run through a thorough and instant evaluation of your characters and provides you with a score instantly free of charge on how much of a sue your oc may be. As much as I like songbird, her abilities at times seem abit too strong or too convienient for some occaisionsn and Yue's powers as well.

I know I said I read this when it first came out and you might be wondering why I waited so long to put this review up. Well to be honest I started thinking more about it lately and I wanted to be as helpful and constructive as I could be. I know many others just scream Mary Sue and claim that the story is crap because of it but they are wrong. The Mary Sue does show itself occasionally (again it is mostly in the last few chapters) but aside from that it is usually quite even. The story is great, and I just wanted to put a helpful review that may assist you in your future works. Thank you for your time and patience I know I put down a lot here.

I don't think the "trial" chapters were done well. I feel like you wanted to empower Yue too much and just made her seem like an unrealistic character. I suppose she perfectly embodied chaos because she had no constant viewpoint. She always seemed to change her mind or just spout out something and go off on that tangent. I don't really care that her father learned how to do a Blood Eagle from vikings. You could have just as easily made her just mention it was a technique from the vikings. Overall, I think it was an alright story with some characters that went OOC sometimes. But the ending chapters were the worst part and i felt they ruined what could have been a nice ending.

Now that I got a chance to review this story. I love it despite some errors, if I can truly rate this fic: 5/5 FF Stars. This story was truly interesting and also great to read, despite many transformers fiction stories I read. I can wait to start reading the sequel.

Hi again! I asked you on the first chapter about me using your work (and giving credit). I thought it was rude of me not to post a comment so, here I am.

It. Was.
AWESOME!

Hi! I love your artwork on DeviantArt, so I decided to copy a few of Songbird's details. Also, I was planning to make a story with my Predacon OC, Fae. Are both of those okay to do? (I won't be posting on this website or DeviantArt, and I'll give you credit.)

I really really love the story ... Hope you make another one like this ️️

This was truly amazing! Your writing is great and you let the Charakters act perfectly. I really like how they developed and changed in the time of the fic.
You drew me in with this fanfiction and I just could not stop to read it.

The last few chapters with Yue first really confused me and I thought it would be a bit too much.
But after reading the end everything turned out great! Amazing work!

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Oh, hot Damn!
Got me all emotional and shit.
Got me all crying, people looking at me all weird and shit.
This kinda stuff could make a veteran torture specialist fall to there knees in despair.

Lol, great book! XD

I will be reading that story! PREDACONS IS LOVE! PREDACONS IS LIFE! :D

"Now his punishment is no longer mine to get! Let us pray that Shockwave will continue to suffer for all eternity in the deepest circle of hell, Amen." OMFG! I laughed at this way to much! ROFLMFAO! X'D I'm so glad Yue has a sick twisted sense of humor! hahaha!

Very nice writing. :)

oh god that last part i almost woke up the whole hose soo funy