Honestly one of my favorite fanfics on this site. The characters you've created are so fun to read about, and I love meeting new ones! I love the support conversations! I could go on but lest just say I love practically everything about this fic. Keep up the great work! I'm excited for the next chapter!

Donkan needs to stop getting hurt before I have a panic attack, real talk.

I loved this chapter! So much action, it's awesome.

Donkan's crush on Josh is so cute, I can't wait to see how it develops more later :).

Corrin was so cool and personable right off the bat that she was instantly one of my favorite characters. The peaceful ending was a nice change of pace after the last few cliffhangers.

Way to keep the surprises coming. I was hoping Josh and Donkan would be paired up for watch but alas, it was too much to ask for. Nice move for Donkan to not explain even though he was caught. All in all, I think the plot is progressing very smoothly and I am hooked!

The note says that you're awful at writing battle scenes but that was a captivating battle nonetheless. The main character is well developed with sufficient knowledge of the game as well as sufficient references to his past life. The interactions between Donkan and the other characters have given a good feel for all their personalities, too.

The sense of humor in this is brilliant. It's just often enough to prevent the story from being dull yet also adds to the plot and keeps the story moving. When I play the game I see the graphics but when I read this I am fully immersed in the world and I can imagine being there and it is way more enjoyable. Good job! Also, that was a very captivating way to end the chapter.

I love the diction and style used to write this. Also, jumping right into a Risen battle was a top-notch idea.

Did I say how much I love the premise of this story?

I really liked this chapter! I love the cast of characters that have been incorporated so far. I am starting to ship Corrin with Del'fi. I am wanting to learn more about Arca's older brother, but I'm sure that will come with later chapters. I really liked Arca's support with Donkan. Keep it up friend!

It's nice to see Donkan getting along with others, but I didn't know he thought of himself as narcissistic... might have missed that. Well, I also feel the pain of having most if not all of my writings recorded into my digitals. I used to have some notes written down in a note book, but I lost it... Writting might be harder than I originally thought it was... Good chapter though. Good Luck with the rest of this story.

I really liked this chapter! I love Corrin's character, especially. She reminds me a bit of Nowi, almost. I really liked all of the fine details you put in, like the color of Corrin's bow and the description of the Energy Drop. Keep it up friend!

I've read all four chapters so far, and I love it. Tbh, I'd have to say Del'fi is my favorite character. She reminds me of Severa from FE: Awakening. The only thing I'd critique about is... the factual information. You seem to be putting too many direct references to the video games in the story. "... I was fairly certain its might was in the neighborhood of 23..." and instances in previous chapters. Other than this, it's awesome!

Wow, a Risen with a legendary weapon. I wonder what kind of bad guy they're facing against if they just give super weapons to random Risen. nice to see you working on the story again. Kudos for another chapter written.