I stopped reading at chapter 14 and skipped to the last chapter just to comment. Your fanfic is not bad per say, but it's great either. Seriously, I don't know why some people actually like this fanfic I mean its not that bad but it just doesn't make sense. Your fanfic is more of a crackfic (it's not that great for a crackfic too, but it's not bad; it's somewhere between bad and ok)... If you were aiming for a more realistic approach well, your obviously doing something wrong. Your fanfic lacks common sense, the pace of your fanfic is rushed and your writing style is lacking too (i.e. emotions that connects to readers).

I stopped reading at chapter 14 and skipped to the last chapter just to comment. Your fanfic is not bad per say, but it's great either. Your fanfic is more of a crackfic (it's not that great for a crackfic too)... If you were aiming for a more realistic approach well, your obviously doing something wrong. Your fanfic lacks common sense, the pace of your fanfic is rushed and your writing style is lacking too (i.e. emotions that connects to readers).

This chapter is a bit boring.

Ok... First, she is not panicking and asking (mentally) questions...Why? It does not make sense anyone would surely panick and ask questions.
Second, the way Ciel and Sebastion should talk is as if they were in the old age and they shouldn't be talking in 21st speech pattern.

So far, for your first chapter it's lacking common sense.

Great story. Fingers crossed for some major PlutoXOCXDrocell, please update soon.

Lol I enjoyed this

That was an epic ending line! Please update soon!

THIS IS THE MOST AMAZING THING IN THE HISTORY OF EVER! Please update soon!

omg. go pluto!

Ugh... Do you always have to injure her!?

Lol Nice one I liked it who knew Elena could RnR
Please keep up the good work ;)

Haha I think this is a cute first chapter. Every fan girls dream

Hope u update soon your story is awesome

hope you update soon

Will alois take over elena too?