Ten: I'm lucky
Me, looking at canon: Are You Sure About That

Spell it with me now: D

Totally cute! Love the story.

Thanks for the ride.

God Bless,
Tauriel Skywalker

I still don't like the way you ended up skipping all of 11 for the story, or how the separation felt so forced to begin with... but I have to admit, you ended it masterfully. Bravo!

Just to reiterate... you're doing a great job with this story! It's only the underlying "have to stay away/going to die" sub-plot that bothers me by feeling forced and artificial.

Ok, so, don't get me wrong, I still love this story and have high hopes for it... but I gotta say... the whole thing about Rose "needing to leave" feels forced, particularly after it was already sort-of done for season 3. It just doesn't really feel natural this time... almost like you're running out of steam. That happens to ALL writers at times tho so try not to worry about it. It might mean putting a story on hold for a couple of years even sometimes, but don't worry if that's the case. You're still a brilliant writer 3

You wanted to know what we felt about this chapter... so here it is.

I am both greatly saddened by it, and very relieved. Sad because of the actual event and realization, but relieved because, with the sorts of dangers they live thru anyway, it's no place for being pregnant or for kids to grow up with.

As to the chapter itself, I think you wrote it masterfully. You captured a very human tragedy very well but also turned it into something beautiful with a ray of hope on the horizon. The way you write humbles me greatly, and I have a degree in Creative Writing! Very well done.

You should know... the way you write the Doctor and Rose... you have a far better understanding of love than most other humans combined. 3

Like all writers, you're too hard on yourself. Your version of this episode was sooooooooo much better than the actual episode.

HOLY CRAP! From this chapter's intro A/N... I had no idea you were so young. The fact that you've done such a brilliant job with this story at such a young age is amazing! You have a great talent. I hope you keep up the great work!

While I think this chapter was amazing and you handled great, I think it could have done without the last glitch. Don't get me wrong, that last glitch makes sense... I just think that dragging out that scene, with setting the levers, using the magnaclamps, then getting to the lever etc, could have added more suspense and tension to give an even bigger feeling of relief when that gold webbing caught her. For the people that were reading this as each chapter was published.. it would have been high adrenalin time. For those like me reading it complete, seeing there's a bunch of chapters still to go... I was wondering if something was going to go horribly wrong and the rest of the chapters might be about the struggle to fix it. If you wanted to REALLY drag out the suspense... you could have even made it a cliffhanger, having the chapter cut off as she's falling and the next chapter pick up with her panicking and then getting caught by the net. Don't get me wrong tho... I still loved this chapter... just thought you might like a bit of advice in case you ever go back and redo anything.

I never hated Reinette, but I had been upset with the Doctor for not being more considerate of Rose in that episode. I like the way you changed it. I think your version is MUCH better... with one exception lol. You REALLY need to re-edit this chapter. Three years or five years, you have to pick one :-P

Still loving this story. You've got the odd typo here and there, but that's no real big deal. Then end of this chapter (3) though could use just the slightest amount of extra padding. From the library scene to the end feels just a little rushed. Maybe include a bit of Jack talking to her as well explaining something like the merging with her past self caused a nightmare or something? Just an idea, it's still a wonderful rewrite so far! 3

Love it so far :) If I may offer one little bit of advice... you might wanna just ask Time-Lord Google about terms that you are not 100 percent certain about. Femoral Artery, for example, is in the thigh, not the arm. One way to remember that is the Femor is the thigh bone. Keep up the great work! Ta :)

This more involved romance with 10? OMFG I CAN’T WAIT!