damn good

While the writing quality of your story is good, please note this part of the Content Guidelines:

"Please note FanFiction does not accept explicit content, Fiction Rating: MA, and the rating is only presented for reference."

Remove all detailed descriptions of the physical interaction of sexual or violent nature in the story if you want it to remain at this site, or upload it to a site where "Fiction MA" content is permitted like Archive Of Our Own.

Nice lemon that is long enough to be interesting but short enough not to falle asleep while reading it! Great writing style 3 Read you bio btw and if you haven't already read Divergent (Veronica Roth) and Endgame (James Frey)

You should really continue or make it a two shot, like the morning part of the day...

You're a great writer

soooo cute. i know cassie did the official version of their first time but yours is much better

I Loved it so much!
i liked all the emotion and diologe and it was one of the best lemons that i have read in a long time.
i really liked it!
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# Clace Forever

you wrote a good lemon

Well written.

This was really cute and romantic. I love how you wrote it.

aww cute

nice. one of the best clace lemons

It's a solid first effort. If you're going to keep writing and posting, I highly recommend you find a beta. Having that other set of eyes will be really beneficial for basic edits and structure. It's clear you've read a lot because you've got the lingo of romance and smut. Keep writing and keep practicing. Good start!

This was fantastic for your first fanfic so romantic and cute, hope to see more from you ;)

You are an amazing writer you should post more stuff