Heir not heiress especially since your character is male

I sympathise with Desmond. Although I expected Primogeniture to be prominent in Hell, since mostly the males seem to inherit the lines, and females do so when it is only last option. So the sister of Desmond should never have been able to inherit. The title of Lord was naturally his for the taking.

At the very least, he could of conquered this new realm with little problem. Subjugation is always great fun. Good story.

I like the concept but a problem you might have to take in consideration is that Desmond easily overpowers every character in the show , so it might be interesting if gets a rival of some kind

Don't know if your still writing this but I find it quite enjoyable. If you plan on continuing it in the near future I suggest you maybe to write the next chapter about Saito and the group recovering from the first battle and explaining everyone what a devil is.

Please dont cancel its fricking awsome if you still cancel it your choice but i tell you its great

Interesting story setting and development so far.
Really looking forward to how Desmond is going to take over the world.

interesting development. i didn't really like the abrupt ending.

This story is great so far I love it,I think it is great that all the DxD characters you make are so evil and cool since there are not that many good villains but is Desmond ever going to go back to his world?

I find this to be a brilliant story.

great chapter, though the dialogue was a bit wooden.

very interesting story so far. not too much you need to work on, though the end came a bit abruptly.