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great job

I luv this story!,~

I want more Sephiroth/Cloud!

I'm trying to form a review, and the words just aren't at my fingertips *sigh*. Well I found this an extremely enjoyable read, my only advice would be adding to some descriptings like ' he wore, from what Cloud could see, a finely pressed silk shirt and a red tie without a crease of the same material' or something like that. I dunno, its your story, so just a tip. Anyways, happy writing.

I like it!

Vamp!Seph controlling a student!Cloud -very nice concept.

Just a small critique - some of your dialog is hard to read - usually you should start a new paragraph whenever a new speaker starts speaking.

Again, awesome work.

I've been to busy with my story lately but I just read this and i'm telling you right now that your awesome and I'm jealous lol

Really good for first attempt at LEMON, I thought you were an expert till I read the foot note

Ohhh! I so want sequel of Zack and Angel.

I love it!

Please oh please, please continue! And I love to see the evil Cloud and his master!

A very good story and would love to read a Zack and Angeal story.

Love this story! please continue.

Please please please to an angeal/zack follow up. Pplplllleaaaaaaassssseeeee.
That was great