Beautiful! Extremely beautiful!

Lovely story! Thanks for sharing it with us.

Really nice. Any chance for a sequel? Maybe morning after?

Haha this was an amazing story! I love that they still got together even when Harry tried to be noble.

Nice story, although there are a couple places that I feel are extra and our not really needed for the story.

The first is that part where you justify why Gabrielle did not feel pain for her first time, I also feel that the sentence structure at the end of the paragraph could be improved upon by either adding a period after the portion saying "pain their first time being the creatures of sex they were" Plus adding the word 'that' before the word were.

To finish up fixing that paragraph something needs to be done to make the rest make sense, I don't really see a strong connection between veela not feeling pain and them being his kryptonite, this would make it seem that veela are his weakness rather then crying girls.

The second part that could be fleshed out is to remove the last sentence of the paragraph near the end that began with "Gabrielle was in heaven." From my perspective saying in an offhand manner that Harry was able to vanish her panties because of his recent birthday really adds nil to the story and also feels tacked on her unimportant to the flow of the story.

plz write seq

Wow. Interesting plot. I enjoy having Gabby as a character sadly not enough stories. Sex centered or not. Um a few minor tweaks with zee accent bits but not bad.

well I love that you are writing harry with characters seldom used like gabby and astoria.. I am decinitrly looking forward to a sequel to this and the ginny cheating on harry story ..

with this one I can't really choose who I want to find them together naked and still joined.. Molly would blow up, ginny would blow up, fleur would wonder wtf but appoline would likely be hsppy but concerned.. I think it would be a nice touch for appoline to find them and then however you want to bring the weasleys and other into the chaos feel free.. As long as ginny/molly get told off forobviously using a love potion to manipulate harry and gabby/harry are happy together.. Maybe instead of harry having to leave to hunt voldemort he and his death eaterscould be planning on going on a muggle raid but instead appear in opposing gangs territory and so they are cut down in the middle of the gang war haha.. I dunno I doubt you will use his but I think its funny ..

You should make Ginny and Fleur find them, then Ginny goes all crazy and tries to kill Gabrielle, while Fleur tortures Harry. Then Fleur doesn't want to have her wedding, because she's busy fending off Ginny from Gabby, and making sure Gabby isn't hurt or anything.

Nice!

Awesome story.

This was very good Harry with a Veela is always excellent and a good match Harry has a great capacity for love yet never usually gets to experence it and a being of love and sex is an ideal counterpart for him. Harry would need and appreciate loyalty as well. In the books Gabrielle should have been older as they would have been perfect for Harry, Veela can deal with standing out and fame something Harry needs to know.

I think Harry would need someone to love and fight for if he is to have any chance against Riddle or the resolve to contiinue against him.

Harry seems on good terms with those considered magical creatures so a Veela makes sense for him to be with and having a home and ties outside the UK is a good idea given how the Ministry operates and has treated Harry.

I hope Gabrielle and Harry remain together if the love of Sirius could drive Riddle away Harry in love or driven by lust could hurt or weaken Riddle. It would be good if Harry left on the Horcrucx without Ron and Hermione as he planned and Gabrielle could go with him. Riddle would go spare trying and failing to find Harry. The Death Eaters could rebel while this is going on as being so focused on Harry caused the war to be lost for the Death Eaters had they taken over then gone after Harry things would have been easier.

For fun it would be good if Fleur discovers Harry/Gabrielle or fails to notice what is going on because she is busy with her wedding. Although the Wedding stopped would be best as Fleur could not have been happy getting married in the Burrow of all places.

I do think the whole beast in the chest regarding Ginny was a love potion but no love potion could match a Veela's love and lust so Harry loosing all interest in Ginny and getting hit with a Veela fire ball would be a bonus. Of if Fleur went to defend her sister I never liked how Ginny, Molly and Hermione the future Weasley treated her and how Bill did not stand up for her.

Given all the time Ron/Hermione spend with each other as prefects and in the Holidays without Harry maybe Hermione could get pregnant as a way to keep her from following Harry and Ron was never a good friend or loyal follower. If they kept their relationship secret or doubted Harry like they did during the hunt even before they left Harry has reason to cut ties with them.

Harry doing what Dumbledore's brother suggested and leave and let others deal with Riddle would be good too as Harry could be happy in France and he has plenty of reasons to resent magical and muggle UK. If Harry could gain access to his wealth before he left the UK Ministry would have very little leverage over Harry.

A nice end to the chapter I hope for more.

that is fucking awesome man cant wate to see how the rest of them take this little couple

If Harry and Gabrielle both fell asleep naked, who finds them in the morning? :D