Very well written. Great job!

I can imagine this as an entire original story with original characters. Just sayin, if you change their names, it could be easily an original story.

AMAZING! Also, of course Gilbert would photobomb! Why didn't I see that coming?

Awwwwwwww, I wanted to see a sassy kiku tho...

Wow, I'm not used to having Alfred as the shy one in usuk fics, but this is AWESOME!

OMG I KNOW THIS WAS WRITTEN AGES AGO BUT THIS IS LIKE THE 15'TH TIME IVE READ IT! ITS AMAZIIING!

What are you saying?! You're absolutely not bad at writing smut!
That was hot. And accurate. Long smuts are unrealistic - nobody can have sex for hours and not comming even once.
Good job! :)

This story deeply touched me. Don't belittle yourself as a bad writer. Yes, at times the typos were rather present and Arthur was out of character for half the story, but the emotions throughout just felt so genuine and everything seemed like such a nice slice of life kind of fic. I think it had great pacing and you did a really good job! As an ex-cutter, it was moving to read this and watch Alfred and Arthur progress together.

I have some questions you might consider:

Your chapters are extremely long, there could have been 2, 3 or even 4 chapters for this one particular first chapter.

Who is Archie, and Thom? Are they OC's if they are, are they Arthur's siblings? Or are they his friends from the crew? When I imagined Arthur's sleepover, I imagined just the four hetalia characters, then BAM, two OC's outta nowhere huehuehue

Other than that, this is going well!

One part during the movie Archie screamed; "Harry! Take out your wand!"

...Oh my! I did the exactly same thing when I watched the movie in theatre! XDDD

Poor Alfred... I am not used to read Fic that Al was so lack of self-confident I love the Al being airhead and laugh-loving but meanwhile I like your writing and unusual that Al was not sort of ass jork when meet a Punk!Arthur! Yeah I akways love Punk!Arthur;p

Being strong Alfred! You can make it!

loved it, this made me scream and almost cry and laugh damn i hate these boys they make me remember how pathetic my love life is...i don't even have a boyfriend! THese boys are so cute and i love the song they keep singing to. well i must sleep goodnight/goodmorning

Please keep writing fanfiction... This is like awesome and like I cried and I love you

God damn amazing. You, are the best writer in the whol freakin' world. Everything was perfect, and it felt like it was a real life story. Awesome job!

This was such a beautiful story. I can relate to it on a deeply personal level. I bet a lot of others can, as well. I'm definitely favoriting this one :)

Okay but no. Seriously. Trigger warnings. Not to go all Kankri on you (cuz now I know you're into Homestuck) but FOR THE LOVE OF TROLL JEGUS TAG YOUR TRIGGERS!
Like, I'm being so serious right now. I said I was awesome and couldn't be triggered. I've read shit like this before. Well, the beginning of the chapter severely triggered me and I had t spend ten minutes staring at my left arm talking to myself and stroking it telling myself it was okay and there was nothing there. It was tingling like a motherfucker. I was honestly freaked the fuck out there for a bit. Because I felt what Alfred was doing to himself. I felt it because I -knew.-
Don't get me wrong, I'm not mad or anything like that, but seriously. If my anxiety problem was any worse I may have had a panic attack or something.
I don't know when you'll see these reviews of mine, but when you see them, please insert trigger warnings. Please, please please for the love of God just do it.