I'm crying

That was sooo good :) Buy sooo sad:'( Great story!

This feel oddly accurate. I kind of like when things don't end well

ow :(

Thank you for making me feel bad for Leo Valdez for the 123458933934th time

I AM DIEING INSIDE THANKS A LOT THE FEELS! WHY ARE YOU SUCH A GREAT WRITER?

Wow, I really liked this. I've never really considered this pairing, but this was really well-written and believable and I especially liked the ending. My only gripe is that Leo seemed a bit out of character, but that might just be because I haven't read any HoO books in a while (I haven't read MoA or HoH).

Other than that, I thought it was really interesting and you portrayed the characters well.

Keep Writing!

Sydney

Naww, that was sad :( Just one thing, Jason and Leo don't have the same godly parent, so they don't share a cabin...

Hi!

Okay, first of all, nice job on the ending. However, the bit with them firing stuff at each other was a bit over the top?

Too many sentence fragments. It could work as a style, but then you'd have to alter the language into something with a little less slang.

The whole thing felt a little bit rushed as well. Either take away some of the plot points or make it longer. Say, 3000 words.

Overall, nice job.

Oh, god, this is so awesome, I swear this is beautiful

I love this. Yeah.

I kind of wish you would write something for Prince of Tennis if you know about it but that's just a wish, not a command or something

I love your writing, do I sound too much like a fangirl when I say it?

I've become more open to slash after reading /Will Grayson, Will Grayson/ and
;_; WHAT
So. LeoJason. I'm not sure how well it works canonwise but whatever the Leo and Jason do work in a crazy way you have portrayed here are ;_; more than anything else and
tHE ENDING
shoutout! to the length because it's short but in a powerfulish way and some of your long fics take a while to chew through so thank you for this short piece

My knowledge of the Percy Jackson universe is sadly limited to the movie I saw a few years ago. I fear I may be a little too old to get into it now, but I'll do my best.

This is just lovely! It's so angsty, full of emotion. Very mature writing too and by the end I was feeling so sorry for two characters that I know nothing about (and if I do, I've forgotten). You've covered some big issues with delicacy and finesse.

[He watches Jason from afar, perched in a sturdy elm tree with a book on mechanical engineering sitting in his lap, his goggles askew.] Nice first line. You place your character well for the readers to see. I think it'd have more punch though if you gave a name of the book.

Could you condense a few of the smaller sections though? It seems a bit odd, having a new section and it's just two lines or so. Interrupts the flow a little, in my opinion. But it's still great, don't worry.

Lovely piece.

Cheers.

when i saw the summary i kinda got scared out of review tag, to be honest... i'm not the world's biggest fan of leo/jason. or PJO. or FFN slash, because most of it tends to be really badly written. but I read this and I was pleasantly surprised by it. you really got into Leo and Jason's minds very well, and it was so *sniffle* SAD. but written excellently. :)

You just like broke my heart. Whaaa-?
This is amazing, sad and fuckin' horrible to the fuckin' core. But amazing.
You did it, made me happy, confused, angry, and then horribly heartbroken in a ONE-SHOT.
Congratz you witch from hell.
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Oh My GOD! OoO
That was amazing!
I love it. I totally love it!

I mean, leo feelings are so... I don't know, just Leo, I think you did a great job with that

And Jason... That sexy coward... I just love it! *w*

It was pretty cool, thank you por write it!

I LOVE it **

m'kay zoey this is veryvery good and i can't believe that i haven't read this already but maybe i have and i haven't read anything in the percy jackson & the olympians community for a long time that hasn't been jason reyna or maybe jasonpiper and jasonleo in general just never came to mind. [He wants to say, You could be the Golden Boy if you wanted. You could be Batman, I could be Robin. Always. For an eternity.

He wants to say, I just wanted to lie in the shade of your shadow, look up at you, and smile.

He wants to say, Didn't you love me, you bastard?] these lines are my absolutely favvys and your writing style is BEAUTIFULLY FLAWLESS, :)

xoxo clara