Is it bad I kinda laughed?

You really make percy underpowered...

I think percy is a bit underpowered, after giants and titans, this hunter should be walk in a park, but otherwise, a great story!

Those pillars are part of something very old, but not something they’d recognize I don’t think. If they’re designed to draw in heat, then they have one of two purposes: To bring it up, or pull it down. Either way, it’s going to affect New Rome very badly.

Darkness falls with blood and sand! That’s the lunar eclipse! Lunar eclipses are often called Blood Moons, and Nyx is only strong at night!

This is bad. The reason that the land of the dead has its own name is because it’s the Primordial of Shadows, Death, and Mist: Erebus. He’s generally perceived as a merciful entity who houses the souls of the departed, but not always. And Darkness falls likely refers to his wife, Nyx, who also showed up in The House of Hades.

Crimson and Gold are often referred to together as fire, which is also concerning. It sounds like...

Well it sounds like Leo is going to use his fire to destroy Nyx, and himself in the process, while Percy is cursed to eternal sleep. The only part that’s escaping me is ‘entombed in fiery hail’.

okay that romance scene was just a tad cliche however you wrote it well and that it was cliche made it work.

I'll be honest the fact that it was Orion was entirely expected by me at least. I called it the minute he started boasting of his hunting skills.

I love that you brought Grover back. I wasn't happy when they didn't bring Grover for the HoO books

I loved this chapter but aren't Percy and Annabeth supposed to know who Nyx is from their encounter in The House of Hades

WHAT THE HELL MAN?

WHAT?

I still get amazed at this story. Best ever Percy Jackson fanfiction all the time:)

What is happening?!

"A bit on the full side" isn't bad thing so to speak... keep up the good work!